October Orbitals

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October vortexes
      summer 
  scampered
   with steam 
     auburn haze
Keats poetized 
   musings of
darkness
   In windswept
mardy
   asteroid
blizzard unruffled
      booms 
merciless
along 
     October shore

what creates
    glitter within
probe
     craves
from
   beyond&
rose petals 
   adorn
floor
   loosed in 

whirling breeze
  & cotyledons 
perishing
      prophylactic's not
persuasive to
   everything&
 pay tribute to
petals
    precariousness
during 
    periods 
of upheaval

discover 
snug scope
     within
Equinoctial point
      where 
you settle
      &yet steadfast
suppleness
        soften 
fruitfulness 
          as
diehard Poets
         &devotees of 
dimnesses
        deepening 
autumn's 
        sublumic
deepness 

Written: October 04, 2022

A Brian Strand Premiere Choice Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Brian Strand

NOTE:THIS IS AN OPEN(organic) FORM VERSE   using spaces&breaks without grammatical symbols ,the ' open' relies upon 'the one breath limitation' & so inherently requires the 'reader' (reciter) to input and responds thus making this enigmatic form a two way interplay & interpretatIon unique to the moment& changing according to mood is inherently variable.
Copyright © Brian Strand

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Valsa George

Date: 10/7/2022 8:37:00 PM

Though I too am not quite clear like Vijay about many of the masterly images used, I am sure it is a poem of great depth and its masterly execution is amply rewarded with your first rate placement in Brian's contest ! Congratulations, dear friend !

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/5/2022 4:34:00 AM

Though I can't decipher everything--I know Brian will--- and obviously you have the mastery of this form and so many others my friend.

Bill Baker

Date: 10/4/2022 8:55:00 PM

Unusal form, but I like the openess. It allows the reader many opportunities to feel and express their own thoughts. Good luck in the contest, my dear friend. Bill