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Moon In Pale Depression

Muted evidence proclaimed the subtle oddities of night Lunar time should have reached the zenith of its height No chirping crickets were heard, nor angry feline brawls Lacking was the rhythmic chanting of nocturnal owl calls No lengthened shadows grew where they should be cast The moon, in pale depression, had only risen half mast Strange and sullen manner, for summer's interlude to end As though it were lamenting the loss of a beloved friend Not just physical in nature, but with heartfelt immortal pain Darkened was the dead of night for one whose love was slain In grief there is no consolation, the future bleak and ominous but there remains a hunger for love, one intensely ravenous

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Date: 5/9/2019 11:00:00 PM
Wow, this is wonderful ... deep, forlorn, aching ...and exquisite. Love it, fav-ing.
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Date: 7/22/2018 6:12:00 PM
Really nice to read, and impressed by good use of rhyme. Better than I can, sounds reall, nothing artificial about it.
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/23/2018 6:05:00 AM
Thank you for the kind compliments, Linda
Date: 7/7/2018 10:39:00 AM
Wonderful writing Lin, wow that's sad if even the moon doesn't give it's light, loved it all especially the last line!
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/11/2018 10:28:00 AM
Thanks ever so much for the visit and insightful words, John. I'm delighted that you like it.
Date: 7/7/2018 3:06:00 AM
An absolutely wonderful rhyme Lin!! Your creativity flows so beautifully.. A pleasure to read.. Many blessings to you..
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/11/2018 10:27:00 AM
Thank you for your encouraging words, Robertina.
Date: 7/6/2018 4:14:00 PM
What a divine offering Lin! You capture HOPE as a bird on the wing in this spectacular piece! Ourstanding! : )
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/11/2018 10:27:00 AM
Thank you ever so much for the great thoughts, Connie. Hugs.
Date: 7/4/2018 10:49:00 AM
So sad Lin, but the hunger always remains, I suppose that speaks to our spirit...
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/4/2018 11:05:00 AM
Thank you, Charlie. It's indeed unfulfilling to hunger and thirst for something that's eternally out of reach.
Date: 7/4/2018 8:32:00 AM
Ahh, such a beautiful poem this is, truly a masterpiece and I love reading the imagery you have put in it, certainly a fav for me, good luck
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/4/2018 8:57:00 AM
Thank you very much. It's not for a contest.
Date: 7/3/2018 10:16:00 PM
Truly exceptional poetry my friend. Depths that send the mind wandering into the mysteries of life, loss and love... A fav...
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/4/2018 8:56:00 AM
Many thanks for liking this one and leaving such kind comments. Robert.
Date: 7/2/2018 3:52:00 PM
Gorgeous poem. The Moon and all of Creation so well aligned with the doings of the heart. This is a FAVE for me. Excellent! ! ~ Gershon
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/2/2018 4:26:00 PM
Thanks so much, Gershon. I appreciate the kind comments and the favoring.
Date: 7/2/2018 1:36:00 PM
Oh Lin I feel quite heavy hearted reading the sadness in your lines, so exquisitely penned my friend:-) hugs jan xx
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/2/2018 1:39:00 PM
I felt the weight of a heavy heart when I wrote this one, Jan, but the weight's been lifted...all 180 of him. It took a while but all's well that ends well...W. Shakespeare. Thank you for feeling the sadness.
Date: 7/2/2018 10:51:00 AM
exquisite ...... my heartfelt thanks to you. You are a very powerful poet. Love>Rajat.
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/2/2018 12:39:00 PM
Thank you for such very kind comments.
Date: 7/1/2018 12:22:00 PM
That last verse tells the story of my life! Beautifully sad. Lin. A very poetic write!
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/1/2018 1:53:00 PM
Your life is ongoing and our hearts never bother with a calendar, so love is always possible. Thanks for the read and the fine comment, Danny.
Date: 7/1/2018 8:38:00 AM
Wow Lin, this brings a sadness. A very unique perspective of the moon...love it
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/1/2018 8:56:00 AM
It creates shadows on the moon, doesn't it? Thanks, Tim.

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