Moon In Pale Depression

Muted evidence proclaimed the subtle oddities of night
   Lunar time should have reached the zenith of its height

No chirping crickets were heard, nor angry feline brawls
   Lacking was the rhythmic chanting of nocturnal owl calls

No lengthened shadows grew where they should be cast
   The moon, in pale depression, had only risen half mast

Strange and sullen manner, for summer's interlude to end
   As though it were lamenting the loss of a beloved friend

Not just physical in nature, but with heartfelt immortal pain
   Darkened was the dead of night for one whose love was slain

In grief there is no consolation, the future bleak and ominous
   but there remains a hunger for love, one intensely ravenous
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Barden Avatar
May 9, 2019 at 11:00 PM
Wow, this is wonderful ... deep, forlorn, aching ...and exquisite. Love it, fav-ing.
Milgate Avatar
July 22, 2018 at 6:12 PM
Really nice to read, and impressed by good use of rhyme. Better than I can, sounds reall, nothing artificial about it.
Lane Avatar
July 23, 2018 at 6:05 AM
Thank you for the kind compliments, Linda
Hamilton Avatar
July 7, 2018 at 10:39 AM
Wonderful writing Lin, wow that's sad if even the moon doesn't give it's light, loved it all especially the last line!
Lane Avatar
July 11, 2018 at 10:28 AM
Thanks ever so much for the visit and insightful words, John. I'm delighted that you like it.
B. Avatar
July 7, 2018 at 3:06 AM
An absolutely wonderful rhyme Lin!! Your creativity flows so beautifully.. A pleasure to read.. Many blessings to you..
Lane Avatar
July 11, 2018 at 10:27 AM
Thank you for your encouraging words, Robertina.
Marcum Wong Avatar
July 6, 2018 at 4:14 PM
What a divine offering Lin! You capture HOPE as a bird on the wing in this spectacular piece! Ourstanding! : )
Lane Avatar
July 11, 2018 at 10:27 AM
Thank you ever so much for the great thoughts, Connie. Hugs.
Smith Avatar
July 4, 2018 at 10:49 AM
So sad Lin, but the hunger always remains, I suppose that speaks to our spirit...
Lane Avatar
July 4, 2018 at 11:05 AM
Thank you, Charlie. It's indeed unfulfilling to hunger and thirst for something that's eternally out of reach.
Ajmal Avatar
July 4, 2018 at 8:32 AM
Ahh, such a beautiful poem this is, truly a masterpiece and I love reading the imagery you have put in it, certainly a fav for me, good luck
Lane Avatar
July 4, 2018 at 8:57 AM
Thank you very much. It's not for a contest.
Lindley Avatar
July 3, 2018 at 10:16 PM
Truly exceptional poetry my friend. Depths that send the mind wandering into the mysteries of life, loss and love... A fav...
Lane Avatar
July 4, 2018 at 8:56 AM
Many thanks for liking this one and leaving such kind comments. Robert.
Wolf Avatar
July 2, 2018 at 3:52 PM
Gorgeous poem. The Moon and all of Creation so well aligned with the doings of the heart. This is a FAVE for me. Excellent! ! ~ Gershon
Lane Avatar
July 2, 2018 at 4:26 PM
Thanks so much, Gershon. I appreciate the kind comments and the favoring.
Allison Avatar
July 2, 2018 at 1:36 PM
Oh Lin I feel quite heavy hearted reading the sadness in your lines, so exquisitely penned my friend:-) hugs jan xx
Lane Avatar
July 2, 2018 at 1:39 PM
I felt the weight of a heavy heart when I wrote this one, Jan, but the weight's been lifted...all 180 of him. It took a while but all's well that ends well...W. Shakespeare. Thank you for feeling the sadness.
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July 2, 2018 at 10:51 AM
exquisite ...... my heartfelt thanks to you. You are a very powerful poet. Love>Rajat.
Lane Avatar
July 2, 2018 at 12:39 PM
Thank you for such very kind comments.
Turner Avatar
July 1, 2018 at 12:22 PM
That last verse tells the story of my life! Beautifully sad. Lin. A very poetic write!
Lane Avatar
July 1, 2018 at 1:53 PM
Your life is ongoing and our hearts never bother with a calendar, so love is always possible. Thanks for the read and the fine comment, Danny.
Smith Avatar
July 1, 2018 at 8:38 AM
Wow Lin, this brings a sadness. A very unique perspective of the moon...love it
Lane Avatar
July 1, 2018 at 8:56 AM
It creates shadows on the moon, doesn't it? Thanks, Tim.
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