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Joy Surfs the Ocean

Dedicated to my friend and fellow Souper, Jannie Breedt
Ocean-born wave rhythms rock their roll just as motions my own soul does extol since first we seascaped soul to soul. From your African, violent, dust bowl straight to my United States’ role, joy surfs the tides making us whole. Your expanse is constant inside my coral mind as though our ebb and flow were cast entwined. An ocean sees our coast lines combined. Though our shared depths are confined, our seawaters’ yang is surely aligned. I sail my authentic towards your motion’s drift, feel its sincere floatage dip down and high-lift. Never do I rue an anchor of sea-worn shrift turning shallow the depth of my sailed gift. Our vibration rides the same sea of mapped calm. You soothe my torrid zones as a salt-healing balm might whip storms into the tranquility of a psalm. Your grace and kindness of steady waves fill my otherwise deep-sunken sea graves. Bright life vests secure notes you sincerely toss afloat. Our waters churn beyond human means of control - they plunge and sweep as independently designed, leaving us with merely sand’s feel to finger sift. Yet my endless depths harbor no sinking qualm for my intangible drownings, your tangible saves. I am a better me with each beached, ocean note. ... CayCay February 19, 2018

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Date: 3/16/2019 11:31:00 AM
Beautifully done,CayCay, great imagery. Congratulations on your well deserved win! Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 3/15/2019 10:51:00 PM
CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win, CayCay! AWESOME! Janice
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Date: 3/15/2019 9:44:00 PM
CayCay, this poem is beautiful, and from what I've read in your comments below your reason for writing it is commendable. Also, this is 1 of 2 poems in the Mile 24 contest using Greg's Minuanetta form, which I was unaware of until now. Congratulations on your third-place win on Mile 24 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon Contest. Only 3 contests to go before the final! ~Mark
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Date: 3/15/2019 9:33:00 PM
Oh, I remember THIS one! This won 2nd place in my "Minuanetta" contest, and is such a gem ... I'm reading and thinking, hmmm, this form looks familiar ... oh yes, it's a Minuanetta! What a fun surprise. Not an "official" form, but maybe someday. A wonderful write, and so deserving, CayCay - congrats! :-) <3
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/15/2019 11:21:00 PM
I have to add - Jannie was the very first person here to befriend me and write to me, (he says he "discovered" me, though I'm not much to discover, lol), and to recognize my work as something special, and he will always be a dear friend, one of my favorite Soupers, and extraordinarily special to me. I can tell that he touched your heart in a very similar, honest and caring way ... we are indeed honored to call him friend. Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 4/30/2018 1:54:00 PM
OMG CayCay!....you have outdone yourself with this amazingly beautiful tribute to out dear friend Jannie! Your lines flow with the oceans rhythm with the sincerity of your words crashing upon the shores in a crescendo's melody of inspiring love! I more than loved this piece, it needs to be framed! Needless to say it is going into my faves! I am finally feeling better today...less pain and nausea gone with meds. Thank you for your prayers my dear friend. Love, Connie xxoo ; ) Almost forgot to congratulate you on a very deserving win!
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 5/12/2018 9:02:00 AM
And to know that I have such dear friends overseas that would walk through fire for me leaves me dumb and mute.
Date: 4/30/2018 12:48:00 PM
I came back to tell you that Im so deeply touched again and how proud of you to get silver placement. I will never forget this. I am sending the.link to my buddies out there. Off course i will be back when all this mess I am in gets sorted out. Thank you dear heart
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Date: 4/29/2018 7:28:00 PM
I thought it looked familar. I see that I visited it in February!
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Date: 4/29/2018 7:26:00 PM
OH MY, Caycay here is a gorgeous one !! So glad for you that you got a second place. Congratulations, my dear friend.
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Date: 4/29/2018 3:21:00 PM
CayCay, you turned this challenging form into a beautiful poetic presentation! Congratulations on your well-deserved podium win. Hugs, Sandra
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 4/30/2018 12:44:00 AM
Hey, Sandra. I had no idea Gregory had finalized the contest until a minute ago and can now edit to show the dedication to fellow poet, Jannie Breedt, for whom I wrote this. Thank you for your generous words that matter a great deal to me. All the best, always ... CayCay
Date: 4/29/2018 1:08:00 PM
Cay-Cay - this was delightful, joyous, descriptive, flowing, and I just plain adored everything about it! Congratulations on your placement, and thank you for entering my contest! :-)
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 4/30/2018 12:42:00 AM
I am so delighted right now, not only with my placement but because I can finally edit it to include the dedication to my good friend, Jannie Breedt, for whom I wrote it. He has known all along, but I want all to know how special he is. I just got on Soup after a couple nights away so I'm tardy telling you that I appreciate the time and effort you put into sponsoring this contest, that I enjoyed your form and thank you all around for many things. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Date: 4/29/2018 8:15:00 AM
Congratulations on your win! Mine is about ocean too but pales to this. Always enjoy reading anything you write. An amazing way with words and an inner ability to always effectively make me strongly feel something.
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 4/30/2018 12:47:00 AM
Susan: I covet your comments on this poem - I am absolutely thrilled with the gift of your words and truly embrace them for they give me meaning and matter and a bit of heart-pitter-patter that excites my muses adrenaline. Probably a run-on sentence but your comments did make me feel like running on. Thank you so, so much and sincerely ... CayCay
Date: 4/29/2018 7:49:00 AM
Beautiful. CayCay. Congrats on your silver medal finish.
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 4/30/2018 12:48:00 AM
Thank you so much, Line - I'm a bit thrilled to tell you true! I appreciate your visits always and I'm happy to have your presence on this page. All the best to you ... CayCay
Date: 4/29/2018 12:31:00 AM
Congratulations, CayCay on your great win in this challenging contest.
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 4/30/2018 12:51:00 AM
Thank you very much - I truly appreciate your presence and comment! All the best ... CayCay
Date: 3/19/2018 10:47:00 AM
Interesting use of rhyme, especially tying it up in the last stanza. Very nice. Kurt
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 3/20/2018 7:32:00 AM
The form is Greg Barden's - unique, isn't it? Thanks very much for leaving me your comments, I enjoyed reading them. All the best ... CayCay
Date: 2/21/2018 7:14:00 PM
I think the whole poem is beautiful in construction and imagery. I like these lines the best..."I sail my authentic towards your motion’s drift,feel its sincere floatage dip down and high-lift. Never do I rue an anchor of sea-worn shrift,turning shallow the depth of my sailed gift..." perfect and beautiful.
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 2/21/2018 8:06:00 PM
Hey, thanks for boating on over (couldn't resist), I believe I visited you earlier so let me say it is nice to kinda sorta meet you. I appreciate having your pretty face and uplifting comments on my page, and I'm always delighted when I have sparked someone's poetry adrenaline. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Date: 2/21/2018 2:59:00 PM
AWESOME! My sisterof mercy-mercì. At a time like this.. I think some of your salt water splashed into my eye. Humbled here .Youre such a word mechanic! I shall return when this "thing" is through with me. One day I will make you proud. Thank you so much xxx
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 2/21/2018 3:20:00 PM
Love you. I've no need to be proud, but I'm darned fond of content - for myself and those I care about. You are doing an admirable job of walking into the 'thing', no one could do better or more bravely. Sail on, king fish - I'll be here. Thanks - I know you must have made a special effort to show up and that means volumes. Hugs, my friend ... CayCay
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 2/21/2018 3:03:00 PM
..and I agree with Rhonda and Alexis J 's comment. Lookit this girl go. Watch this space.
Date: 2/21/2018 7:09:00 AM
Hi CayCay, What a good take on the contest theme. I agree with Rhoda you are one of the best writers on the soup. You writes wow me all the time. You're such a prolific with a vast knowledge of words. I'm staying away from this contest but I wish you I wish you the best of luck in it:-) Alexis
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 2/21/2018 8:21:00 AM
Oh, Sweetheart - my heart, she smiles in appreciation of all the joy your words gave to me. You just wowed me. Hugs ... CayCay
Date: 2/20/2018 7:55:00 PM
CayCay...let me be the first (probably not!) to say that you are the most talented writer on Soup. Your writes always impart much depth and your words, fascinating. I can so relate to everything you write... You are amazing!
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 2/20/2018 8:03:00 PM
I think my heart just stopped. In a good way. That has never been said to me, or thought by me and so your words are a gift thrilling my core depths. I'm actually shaking. In a good way. I'm just staring at the screen now, I've been validated and not a living soul around to witness it! I hope I get to remember this moment. This feeling you gave me. I am humbled and want to kiss you, then twirl us, well - that might not work out. My hearts a spinning. Thank you. For the rest of my forever, thank you lady of amply abundant talent. Yi
Date: 2/20/2018 7:49:00 PM
I have to be honest... I have yet to read this poem... But first I must say... My Love, Welcome home! I've missed you! (Okay...now I'll go back and read it)
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 2/20/2018 8:06:00 PM
I've missed you as well, have sensed that you've been very busy. Not that my sensor is accurate, but that is the feeling I've gotten. If indeed busy, I hope it is not too busy for your body and anxiety causing. Good to connect, Rhoda - since the first, it has been good. CayCay
Date: 2/20/2018 5:41:00 PM
what a beautiful job you did with this form, Caycay. This whole contest seems SO daunting to me!!! I was able to figure out his directions when I studied it out. He meant that if we wanted to, we could start with five lines and reduce down from there. His example showed him starting with six lines. at least you were ambitious!! I will start with five lines! You are a wonder!!
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Date: 2/20/2018 12:36:00 PM
Hello CayCay, enjoyed reading your poem well formed.. good luck in the contest. My poem was Inspired by the series "The Beverly Hillbillies" when I enjoyed watching this old lady full of spunk in the series..Thank you so much for your visit to my poem. Hugs Eve~`*
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 2/20/2018 12:38:00 PM
I can see how that show would click in your mind for the contest, makes perfect sense. Maybe I'll click eventually for that contest, too. Thanks for stopping by, and take good care ... CayCay
Date: 2/20/2018 10:33:00 AM
A tricky form well handled, CayCay, and lovely metaphors. I'm sure you will do well. Viv x
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 2/20/2018 10:35:00 AM
Thanks, Viv - I always enjoy your comments and value them. All the best ... CayCay
Date: 2/20/2018 6:49:00 AM
The very opening stanza is captivating ... enjoyed reading ...
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 2/20/2018 7:19:00 AM
Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Probir. I hope all is golden in your world. All the best ... CayCay
Date: 2/20/2018 6:06:00 AM
Interesting form that Gregory has introduced, you have done it so well.. do you have a secret African friend? Lovely poem.. I do like the water references, especially the opening line..
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 2/20/2018 7:18:00 AM
No, sir, not secret, but a good friend, indeed. Thank you for your uplifting comments, I really appreciate them! All the best to you ... CayCay

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