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It Happened On a Rainy Night - Collaboration

It Happened on a Rainy Night - Collaboration - 9-5-23 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "Foggy mists engulfed the bright When raindrops fell throughout the night The lampposts glowed at midnight's dark When sweethearts kissed at Lover's Park." Raindrops pattered like two heartbeats Nestled in a sheltered retreat, Shared the velvet touch of a first kiss Secret love, moments of bliss.

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Paige Hind

Date: 9/7/2023 3:50:00 PM

Just beautiful!

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/8/2023 11:09:00 AM

Thank you so much Paige. Charlie was such fun to collaborate with for this contest. Blessings!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/7/2023 8:09:00 AM

I enjoyed your love write. "Good Luck" Have a great day...............

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/7/2023 11:38:00 AM

Thank you so much Paula! Charlie gave us a wonderful jumping off point of inspirations! Blessings for your day!

Hiya Sharma

Date: 9/6/2023 11:29:00 PM

"Raindrops pattered like two heartbeats" Ahh, I absolutely love that line, feels so beautiful and heavenly! "Nestled in a sheltered retreat" Beautiful wordplay there.. "Velvet touch of a first kiss" Gorgeously and delicately described.. Indeed, the rhymes truly make this a very mellifluous and resplendent write.. Hued with mesmerizing romantic ambience!

Silent One

Date: 9/6/2023 11:50:00 AM

Your response to the four lines is so poetic and full of romantic imagery.. It rhymes really well and you created so much in only four lines...great selection of words from your extensive vocabulary..

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/6/2023 12:36:00 PM

Greetings Silent One! How wonderful to receive your feedback! Your comments are always so perceptive and ultimately inspiring! A joy for sure! We are indeed blessed to be wordsmiths with words among our BBF's. If I haven't already conveyed this to you, it is wonderful to have you back here doing the backstroke with the rest of us in the soup! Looking forward to reading your amazing poetic creations my friend! Blessings to you!

Speaks Volumes

Date: 9/6/2023 10:19:00 AM

Nothing nicer than snuggling out of the rain keeping each other warm. This is wonderful Sam. When a poem gives me the warm and fuzzies, I know it must be good. and this one sure did. BOL

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/6/2023 12:29:00 PM

Hi SV! Agreed! Having grown up in the rainy northwest, I learned to love the sound of rain on a dark night especially hunkered down with my hubby! I am just delighted to know this short stanza was able to bring you into the cozy, warmth of this scene and share in the romantic kiss. You really warmed my heart knowing this stanza touched yours! Sending warm and cozy blessings and much gratitude!

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/6/2023 9:52:00 AM

Your writing, dear Sam, is exceptional. The tone and rhythm of your poem are delightful. I thoroughly enjoyed the captivating voice and beautiful rhymes that adorned your piece. It perfectly completes the first stanza.

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/6/2023 12:23:00 PM

Dearest Lasaad, your detailed feedback always honors my efforts and bring such joy to this poet's heart. Thank you so much. What fun to add another verse to Charlie's lovely stanza. He said so much in his four lines about romance, a cozy shelter, a rainy light illuminated by lamplight. I had fun putting myself into that picture and feeling the romantic emotion in his lines. Your lovely message brought a big smile to me. So grateful, dear friend. Sending you warm and cozy blessings!

Valsa George

Date: 9/6/2023 9:40:00 AM

So beautiful and temptingly romantic. Sitting in a sheltered retreat with the loved one in the stillness of the night when it rains outside and sharing the first kiss is indeed exhilarating! I am sure this beauty is going to be crowned ! All the Best dear Sam.

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/6/2023 12:14:00 PM

Dearest Valsa, I am so grateful for your beautiful feedback and lovely compliments. You have pictured this scene perfectly in the light of romance and coziness but then I knew you would see into the details and beyond the words. Thank you for this beautiful gift! Warm and cozy blessings to you!

Ink Empress

Date: 9/6/2023 2:34:00 AM

How beautiful and soul warming is the imagery you’ve painted here with your captivating rhymes and passionate flow of words. I love the sound of rain there, adds warmth to this romantic ambience. I also love “ nestled in a sheltered retreat” and “ velvet touch of a first kiss” made me think of my beloved, and our first velvety embrace. Ah so good! Brilliant write . Goodluck in the contest

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/6/2023 12:10:00 PM

Hi Inky! Your wonderful, gracious feedback warmed my heart like the kiss of these lovers to the sound of rain. It sounds like you also love the patter of rain at night! So grateful for the beauty of your message. I love the sound of rain at night especially if snuggled up with my husband. Special indeed. And, I remember our first kiss when writing this collaboration. This was fun. Thank you for your best wishes! Blessings!

The Situation

Date: 9/5/2023 7:01:00 PM

When read fast it goes very well.

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/5/2023 8:46:00 PM

Thank you. Fun to work with the rhythmic cadence. Blessings

Bill Baker

Date: 9/5/2023 2:23:00 PM

Nice entry for the contest, Sam. I liked the last line best. :-) Good Luck! Bill

Bill Baker
Date: 9/5/2023 8:23:00 PM

No football, but Cross Country (5K) boys and girls' teams, basketball, baseball, softball, bowling. My best sport was Cross Country. Ten years in a row we made it to the State Championships. Won it twice and had one or more runners on All State Team every year. I'm rambling. You're still very active, Sam. Good to hear it. Blessings my friend. Bill

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/5/2023 3:25:00 PM

Hi Bill! So glad this poem resonated with you! Charlie gave us a great foundation and inspiration! Was fun to discover you are a retired teacher and coach. Football? I no longer am a classroom teacher, but have some wonderful opportunities to teach adults, do workshops, teach on the Psalms and lead retreats! Additionally I have taught skiing and coached synchronized swimming! Never thought teaching would provide so many varied opportunities! Blessings!

Tom Woody

Date: 9/5/2023 1:34:00 PM

I like it Sam. So romantic. First kiss is the best!

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/5/2023 1:40:00 PM

Thanks so much, Tom! I loved the cozy warmth of Charlie's poem. It was fun to think about a kiss on a rainy night! Take care. Blessings!