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In This Box

I have asked the mortician to close my box For in this box lies only the shell you knew The shell of who I used to be to you all On my last breath my soul to heaven went Please remember me alert and breathing Not in my box without a breath left in me What is in this box I want no one to view As my soul is no longer on earth with you Please go on with your life knowing this I loved you on earth and will in heaven too In heaven with others who went before me I'll be waiting when God calls you to join us Entry into P.D's "Emotional Write" contest. Written by: Carol Brown 6th Place Winner

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 6/28/2012 6:12:00 PM
very nice poem and thanks for reading mine ....alisa
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Date: 5/15/2012 3:27:00 AM
What a wonderful poem. Very simple I love it. Thanks for the warm welcome.
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Date: 5/15/2012 3:27:00 AM
What a wonderful poem. Very simple I love it. Thanks for the warm welcome.
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Date: 4/10/2012 5:11:00 PM
Congratulations Carol on your win my friend!! How true it is...we are but "a shell" a mere vessel that contains the true prize within...very clever piece and well thought...big huggsss,love deb
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Date: 4/10/2012 1:00:00 PM
Thank you to each and everyone of you dear poets. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/10/2012 11:54:00 AM
Carol congrats on your win, now that's planning ahead..David
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Date: 4/10/2012 10:22:00 AM
congrats on your win.. cory
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Date: 4/10/2012 10:05:00 AM
Carol, congratulations with your emotional poem! Thank you very much for sharing something so emotional with us. Some poems, are tough to express and share out in the open. God Bless. Always~ PD
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Date: 2/25/2012 6:30:00 AM
deep very deep you are a great writer ----------very deep
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Date: 2/24/2012 4:41:00 PM
This is a wonderful write Carol, love Elizabeth
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Date: 2/24/2012 7:31:00 AM
this is so different Carol, in fact make's one sit up and take notice, also make's one think, i like this a lot,, wonderful poem. harry
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Date: 2/23/2012 11:21:00 AM
This is truly a wonderful write Carol! I love how you explained why you didn't want people to see you when you are gone, but to remember you while you were yet living! I totally respect this decision, and I hope that your family will honor your choice to have a closed casket! Your poem is fantastic! Great Work!!
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Date: 2/23/2012 10:49:00 AM
Nice one Carol xx
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Date: 2/23/2012 10:01:00 AM
You have written a unique poem Carol, thank you. - oxox love Anne-Lise
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Date: 2/23/2012 9:48:00 AM
These are rather sad lyrics,thanks for sharing them.God bless you,Hugs!Vienna
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Date: 2/23/2012 8:22:00 AM
Makes me rather sad..why, such thoughts?..but a well-written piece,all the best and luv, jag
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Date: 2/23/2012 6:50:00 AM
Indeed, it is an empty shell that is left behind! The fun-eral should be a time of remembering all the good times shared with the deceased. Thats not to say, there won't be tears because the loved one will be missed. Good poem, Carol.
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Date: 2/23/2012 6:53:00 AM
...on revision: That's not to say there won't be tears, because the loved one will be missed.....(That dang, sneaky comma!)
Date: 2/23/2012 6:25:00 AM
A wonderful write, and I agree with you. A closed box for me, too. Blessings, Rhonda
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