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hypothermia of mussels, or untitled

Footprints walking our snowy, sandy place The silence, oh, how she makes it nimbus — The waves unchanged after falling snow crown, Someone else in you and I; remember — ? I look for the heart of these ebbing shells. The cleanup of sea froze to this blizzard. In my mouth, her hair — tongue stirs minuet Through silver glitter of ice, nor'easter. Like a whipped fish hanging onto a dock, Through a tipping sun in your Aqua eyes, Like the snow — a chilly buoy's heartthrob; Will the ocean between us melt in time — ? Another white wing like frost from seagulls On frigid beach's body; letters traced — Within the surf, our names' wipeout; and still Winter goes without us, in snow and gray.

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Date: 5/18/2025 1:07:00 PM
Paige, this is breathtaking--like a frostbitten love letter written in tide and memory. The imagery is visceral and aching: “in my mouth, her hair -- tongue stirs minuet” and “winter goes without us” especially stayed with me. You capture distance and longing with such icy beauty. This one shivers with feeling.
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Date: 3/30/2025 5:41:00 AM
I certainly haven't even come close to reading all your poems, but of the ones I have enjoyed, this is my favorite. I could feel it because I related to the emotion, felt the chilling sadness ... CayCay
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Date: 3/12/2025 4:24:00 PM
Hey. It's been a while. Are you ok?
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Date: 3/9/2025 9:43:00 AM
Brr..So cold everywhere. Reminds me of the song: Baby it's cold outside. I hate the cold. Soon it will be warm with beautiful flowers.
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Date: 3/3/2025 11:34:00 AM
What a snowy poem this is dear sweet paige, i always admire your metaphors and wordplay! Flows so well too and theres so much depth as always in what you weave! Pleasure reading you today. Sending you light always
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Date: 3/2/2025 6:54:00 PM
This is lovely, Paige, especially like 'silver glitter of ice' and 'will the ocean between us melt in time' - very evocative of longing~
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Date: 2/28/2025 2:06:00 AM
i enjoyed the vivid imagery of your piece, so impressive,paige...thanks too for commenting on my works!
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Date: 2/26/2025 10:23:00 PM
I absolutely love this poem. The line " I look for the heart of these ebbing shells" is beautiful. The entire poem, in fact, is full of stunning metaphors and hidden meanings. You are very talented. Faved.
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Date: 2/26/2025 5:03:00 PM
Your writing evokes a wonderful sense of place, Paige. You have done an excellent job of expressing this beautiful love story through poetry.
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Date: 2/26/2025 3:49:00 PM
This makes me feel all frosty. You write with great atmosphere, Paige.
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Date: 2/26/2025 1:45:00 PM
This picture comes alive. The cold beach and gray environment are common in northern coastal areas. You have succeeded in telling this lover's tale in pure poetic form.
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Date: 2/26/2025 7:30:00 AM
Within the surf, our names' wipeout; and still Winter goes without us, in snow and gray…Surf and snow
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