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*Image of Beach Snowman by Pixabay. Hawaiian Winter - WS Snow trace e'er so oft Soloist compacts barely Do salt waves surge teasingly? Surf and sand hulas Sun melts away mini-me So snowman bid Aloha? Revised: 2023 January 10 Original: 2023 January 08 *1st Place* Winter Sedoka ~~Charles Messina: Judged 2023 January 25 *HMS.

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/26/2023 6:15:00 AM

I wanted to drop by to say congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Thanks for sharing. Sara

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/26/2023 6:50:00 AM

Thanks, Sara, for your visit and expressed thought and praise, Aloha William

Mahtab Bangalee

Date: 1/25/2023 7:27:00 PM

superb and congrats for 1st place

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/25/2023 10:44:00 PM

Thank you, Mahtab, for your support, Aloha William

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/25/2023 1:14:00 PM

This is really cute!! Congrats on number one win.

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/25/2023 5:31:00 PM

Eh! My understanding of Sedoka's is that the first two lines are the answers to the last third line being the question--emphasis of that being between two lovers--thanks Andrea, Aloha William

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/25/2023 8:41:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a fun write/picture. You made me smile. Have a wonderful day..............

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/25/2023 9:17:00 AM

I am pleased, Paula, in your delight and thoughtful kindness, have a blessed day, Aloha William

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 1/25/2023 7:04:00 AM

I'd love your winter William! Congratulations on your win! :)

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/25/2023 7:54:00 AM

Thanks, Linda, I think it's done with mirrors as our snow hugs our mountains in fear of sand, surf, and sun, Aloha William

Anisha Dutta

Date: 1/25/2023 6:26:00 AM

Second stanza is unique. Big Congrats to win on your well deserved poem. Blessings

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/25/2023 6:32:00 AM

Thank you, Anisha, I am grateful for your acknowledgements and praise, Aloha William

Charles Messina

Date: 1/25/2023 5:55:00 AM

Very nicely done, William. I loved how the "Sun melts away mini-me" (lol) Congratulations on your 1st place win in my contest! Aloha Charlie

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/25/2023 6:04:00 AM

Thanks for the placement, Charlie, and I'm pleasantly pleased with your noted highlights and admiration, Aloha William

Michelle Smith

Date: 1/9/2023 8:36:00 PM

It can snow at the beach? :O

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/9/2023 8:57:00 PM

I'm guessing photo-chop somewhat, most likely brought in shaved ice for better effects imagery, Michelle, any icing for social media sites methinks, Aloha William

Joanna Daniel

Date: 1/9/2023 12:13:00 AM

Like the image of skiing waves, William:)

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/9/2023 12:38:00 AM

Thanks for the like, Jo, mostly year-round but a bit cooler winter-early spring months my friend, Aloha William

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/8/2023 9:50:00 AM

Nicely penned, William. You captured a wonderful scene of Hawaiian winter. Good luck with the contest

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/8/2023 9:57:00 AM

Thanks, Lasaad, pardon my sedoka pun but I'm certain Philly entertain tourist like me historically, my friend. Aloha William