Carolyn Devonshire Poet Choka

Ever At Risk In the Glades

Eyes that shone bright green
stood out in the swamp at night
as crickets serenaded.

Surrounded by scents
in Everglades’ treasure trove,
the eyes slowly moved closer.

Our flashlight revealed
scales and teeth four inches long,
a twelve-foot creature nearing.

“We’re going to die,”
I thought as it dove below,
but our boat remained untouched.




*Entry for Linda’s “Treasure Trove” contest
by Carolyn Devonshire

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Carol Sunshine Brown March 15, 2012 at 12:12 PM Congratulations on your well deserved win in Linda-Marie's "Treasure Trove" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol

Joyce Johnson March 14, 2012 at 4:10 PM I think that is where I would not want to be at night or even in the day. Congratulations, Carolyn. Love, Joyce

Ralph Taylor March 14, 2012 at 10:08 AM Congrats on your win, Carolyn. Outstanding. Nice going, my friend. luv and hugs, Ralphie

Anne-Lise Andresen March 14, 2012 at 4:08 AM Send you a congrats for your win. - oxox Anne-Lise

Linda-Marie Sweetheart March 13, 2012 at 9:00 PM congrats Carolyn on sweet success with this incredible write andf entry luv.. thankxx for supporting too..

Daver Austin February 28, 2012 at 12:54 PM Hey! Go, Gators! OOPs, I mean Go Noles! So glad you escaped harm. LOve, daver

John Loving Iii February 27, 2012 at 10:27 AM i remember crabing of a bridge in savanah. looking at the creatures in the water not a zoo. so peacefull they seemed just floating like logs. it was then that i knew; you cant go swimming in ponds down here.

Russell Sivey February 26, 2012 at 5:50 PM This is a wonderful rendition of nature fully revealed through precious verse you have written! I love the way you brought in the crocodile right away and had him in your write at the very end! I love your treasure trove you have for your poem...It wasn't even your treasure trove, it was the Everglades' treasure trove! Awesome Work!!

Leo Larry Amadore February 26, 2012 at 5:49 PM A well set scene most will not have personally experienced. Good work.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders February 26, 2012 at 5:08 PM I like your unique approach for the contest and you have brought back memories for me. I spent quite a few early mornings bass fishing with my dad out in the Glades...good memories. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, Rhonda Rhonda Johnson-Saunders February 26, 2012 at 7:12 PM Thought I should mention, I never had any run-ins with alligators. Thank God! My Dad's remains were scattered in the Everglades (his request) so it is a special place for me.