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Enervated

Something’s under my skin Afflicting my every breath I might lose this conflict Maybe if I Open a window of new breezes Rattling in my attenuate conscious So now I am Feverously irascible At the only creator of myself The path was lined with nails and pieces of glass And I collect them along the way And spit them far from my heart Because I’m run out of origin I am standing in a puddle Nearly empty

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Robin L. Gass

Date: 2/10/2009 5:53:00 AM

A deeply emotion write. Vivid imagery and great lines. "The path was lined......pieces of glass" awesome. I can relate to the feelings in this. Great write, Laura! Love, Robin

Mary Duhart

Date: 2/8/2009 7:29:00 AM

An interesting write. I don't quite understand where you are coming from but Continue to share. thank you for commenting on my work also.

Brian Strand

Date: 2/7/2009 1:00:00 AM

Emotions feel your pen Laura in this write.Rgds Brian & thanks for your kind words

Michael Jordan

Date: 2/6/2009 5:31:00 PM

Laura - very reflective poem that is well written - I reckon we all can relate to the ending emotion - God Bless, MJ

Sharon Winter

Date: 2/6/2009 4:40:00 PM

Seems like you have been through a bad experience. Interesting metaphors here in a poem filled with great depth. Hope all is well Laura. Love, Shar

Carrie Richards

Date: 2/6/2009 2:50:00 PM

This has such a somber tone, a lot of darkness, deep from the soul. Well written, and a lot to absorb, to understand it's meaning. We all might decipher it in different ways. ~ Carrie

Date: 2/6/2009 12:38:00 PM

Much to think about here. The imagery works well. I've already read it a few times, trying to take it in. A lot of depth in this poem. Thank you for sharing it and for your kind comment. Have a good day. Karen