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Drifting Leisurely Inside the Cloud

Ah, drifting leisurely inside the cloud, Watching hot sun’s rays glance across the nose of the winged drone, stealthily slipping proud, I drifted so peacefully through the floes. Updrafts from silent streams beneath arose lifting craft’s nose, unexpectedly plowed through looming cumulus's potential foes, Ah, drifting leisurely inside the cloud. My teeth clinching, I bared tense lips so proud; Sensed gusts of air across the broadened floes, Kissed cerulean sky above allowed Watching hot sun’s rays glance across the nose. Fecklessly, thoughts wondered how high she goes before narrow cockpit collapsed to shroud, and leaps of joy turned into flailing woes of the winged drone, stealthily slipping proud. For a moment, my breathing burst aloud, A sudden chill, fear inside my chest froze leaps of joy turned to sad, flailing allowed, I drifted so peacefully through the floes. I shall land on the grassy field unbowed Receive the welcomed accolades from those who soloed the winds, powerless, uncowed by dangers the upper sky chose to pose, drifting leisurely inside the cloud.
Written/Edited March 1, 2022 Submitted to "2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 4" Sponsored by Mark Toney SECOND PLACE WINNER Written/Edited March 1, 2021 for Rondeau Redouble - Life's Struggles contest Sponsored by Constance La France

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Date: 3/25/2021 9:50:00 AM
What a wonderful perception LM - life inside a cloud. So creative. Enjoyed this very much especially the reference to the drone! Congratulations on your win. Sending you blessings of joy.
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/25/2021 10:23:00 AM
Thanks, Sam. I had a glider in mind as I wrote this. After all, a glider is something like a manned drone, I think. One is at the mercy of the up- and down-drafts. I appreciated your read.
Date: 3/24/2021 2:33:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Milton! This form looks difficult, but you did great! Blessings, Kim M
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/24/2021 4:17:00 PM
Kim, thanks so much for stopping by and making this encouraging comment.
Date: 3/18/2021 6:54:00 PM
Congratulations on your win on this well written poem. love phyl
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/18/2021 7:02:00 PM
Thanks, Phyllis, for the compliment. I appreciated your reading my poem.
Date: 3/12/2021 10:17:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Milton, well written verse. Hugs Eve
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/12/2021 10:45:00 PM
Thanks, I loved writing for this contest. It was quite challenging.
Date: 3/11/2021 9:51:00 AM
Milton, congratulations on your win in my Life Struggles challenge with this wonderful Rondeau Redouble (Modified) poem, well done _Constance
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/11/2021 10:38:00 AM
Thanks so much, Constance. As you can see by my last two poems, I'm focusing on flowers right now.
Date: 3/11/2021 6:31:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A wonderful story/write. I wonder what it would be like to be in a cloud. Airplanes don't count. Have a blessed day......................
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/11/2021 8:50:00 AM
Thanks, Paula. I had drifting through a cloud in a glider in mind...when a sudden updraft could cause real panic. I also saw my poem as an allegory for life. Again, thanks so much for your thoughts.
Date: 3/10/2021 3:06:00 AM
Congrats on your win in the contest.in a difficult to execute form Milton.. 'Drifting leisurely into the Cloud'... loved the title.. God bless.. ~ Ani
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/10/2021 8:58:00 AM
Thanks, Anitha. I really struggled with this one!
Date: 3/10/2021 1:36:00 AM
- Even if most times we question why things have to happen the way they did, just trust in the fact that everything happens for a reason, Milton - Congratulations on your win :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/10/2021 8:57:00 AM
Thanks so much, Sunshine. I appreciated your remarks.

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