Disoriented

a gossamer idea floats down vacated hallways of my mind as it registers, I wonder if maybe I am sleep deprived- are there clouds of exhaustion built up in my eyes? did I perhaps take a psychotropic pain reliever? did low blood pressure cause this dizziness? are my ears playing a crazy trick on me? did the wires in my brain get tangled? am I just confused and distracted? maybe it is a feral fever dream or a delirious hallucination or did you just tell me you love me? written 24 Jun 2021

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Marikate Kingston

Date: 2/7/2022 11:10:00 AM

What a dreamy poem. Aww, your first love. Who would forget their first crush, it made me think of mine. I love the shape of this poem and the last line was my favorite. It made me smile. :)

John Watt
Date: 2/7/2022 3:41:00 PM

Thank you for your kind words and letting me know which line was your favorite, Marikate. I'm glad it could give you a smile and reminisce of first love. Hope you're having a good start to your week ~ John

Beata Agustin

Date: 7/5/2021 6:28:00 AM

Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this. God bless you.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/4/2021 8:57:00 AM

hey way to go. You have not written a lot, but this stellar piece made the winner list. Way to go, my friend

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 7/4/2021 7:38:00 AM

I'm so happy you won with this WOW poem my friend, Really breath-taking. Hope you are keeping well, I'm much better after my procedure but sadly our lady who worked for us for 13 years died of Covid yesterday. Our hearts are very sore that we have lost Thoko, she was a wonderful colleague and friend. Stay safe John, we must try hard to survive, all of us. Have missed your kind cheery wonderful comments. We also lost a cousin who was like a brother to us last week. Hugs and blessings, Jenn.

Edward Ibeh

Date: 7/3/2021 9:27:00 PM

Just beautiful, John:-) Congratulations on your win! Loved the format as well .

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/3/2021 12:28:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. What a beautiful story/write. The ending was great. Have a blessed day/weekend...............

Sam Kauffman

Date: 7/3/2021 12:14:00 PM

Fireworks exploding over the ball park named creativity dear friend! Your time on the IR produced a wonderfully written group of poetic images. And the shape is perfect! Drawing us into your delightful conclusion! Take a spin of congratulations around the bases! Sending you blessings and a Happy 4th to you and your family!

Charles Messina

Date: 7/3/2021 8:53:00 AM

John, this was surely one of my favorites. I absolutely love the ending. Congratulations on your win and thanks for entering my contest. I hope all is well my friend. All the very best...Charlie

John Watt
Date: 7/3/2021 11:05:00 AM

Thank you Charlie for the generous placement and kind words. Hope you have a great 4th of July celebration ~ John

Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 7/1/2021 6:38:00 AM

John That woman must be very pretty, to give you such symptoms!! Great write!

John Watt
Date: 7/1/2021 11:23:00 PM

Krish, her beauty to me is beyond words. Thanks for the comment ~ John

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/27/2021 1:43:00 PM

wow, this is SO COOL, JOhn. Way to go finally giving us a new poem. Sure so miss our chats!

John Watt
Date: 7/1/2021 11:24:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea

Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/26/2021 3:17:00 AM

Lovely poem and great formatting too, hard to create diminishing lines, all the while keeping your idea intact, brilliant, John:)

Shirley Hawkins

Date: 6/25/2021 4:33:00 PM

The song, Your Just in Love. from the show Call me Madam written by Irving Berlin came to mind as I read your interesting verse. Great read. Thank you, John.

Rama Balasubramanian

Date: 6/25/2021 4:43:00 AM

Loved the surprise ending. Fun and unexpected. You should submit it in surprise me contest. I liked the formatting too. Not easy for I have tried

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 6/24/2021 6:48:00 PM

John, I love so many things about this, how the lines slowly diminish, and the richness of metaphors (clouds of exhaustion is probably my favorite, followed closely by feral fever dream) - I thought this was about someone about to faint - until I got to the last line - but that may be a different kind of fainting (is this for a contest?)