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Despicable

Pigtails loosen yet messed, twisted by pliant fingertips of evening’s devilry… tracing her budding breasts, embers gleam from a lamplight, dim… his jerked breathing quickens to rake this young, tender flesh--- from pink , blood red, to pale yellow... despicable! Invading her territory, the blister of muffled silence grates adolescent wails,yet… crazed feasting of desire remains. She quivers under a toppled quilt brushed in wounded cotton...despicable! And while darkness slides on metal frame, he riles, riles with abandon, grinning under a sinister moon arsenic as the sweat of male hunger to ravage a girlish body... trembling, trembling while her cupped mouth stutters, ‘Please step-dad, no!’ ‘Hush…dear baby, I am your angel, guarding you from evil wolves..despicable! Quietly, he pins the knob of conquest until the frail child's porcelain doll splatters on the floor, and then… ............. Re-Posted /1/2017 Contest: Let's Talk About It Sponsor: Richard Lamoureux

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Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 9/2/2017 9:39:00 PM

This is exquisitely powerful and sad, Nette, and I HAVE to fav it ... this really touched my heart, and that's what we MUST do if we're to change this world for the better - talk about things that people avoid, and with a LOUD voice ... THIS is a very loud voice, and such a creatively sublime one! Incredible poem ... blessings, my friend, and congrats on your well-deserved win! :-) <3

Ralph Sergi

Date: 9/2/2017 8:52:00 PM

A very sad poem about the power of a coward. I have no sympathy or empathy as a dad with 3 daughters. You hit the nail on sadnesses head, nette. Congratulations!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/2/2017 12:42:00 PM

Congrats nette!

Brittney Tyler

Date: 9/22/2015 10:31:00 AM

I cried while reading this. The hardest part was where she says "Please daddy, no!" This is so tragic and heartbreaking of a piece. The imagery that you portrayed in your words, so vivid, its as if you are there, experiencing what this girl is experiencing, feeling the pain and fear that she is feeling. This is so well written, and so gut wrenching. Just, amazingly heartbreaking.

Miss Sassy

Date: 9/19/2015 12:45:00 AM

I tried several times to write down what I feel after reading this ... just can't ...... too sad. Congrats ... good write.

Seren Roberts

Date: 9/19/2015 12:09:00 AM

Nette, wonderful write, how a father can do this makes me go cold thinking about it....Seren

Skat A

Date: 9/18/2015 1:34:00 PM

Wonderful win, Nette... SKAT

Skat A
Date: 9/18/2015 1:47:00 PM

PS. this is one of the best I've ever read. gave me goose bumps

Sandra Haight

Date: 9/18/2015 9:35:00 AM

Nette, Casarah says it all below. Such, eloquent powerful imagery in your words presenting such a horrible subject and unfortunate fact of life we try not to think about. Congratulations on your podium win! Hugs, Sandra

Casarah Nance

Date: 9/18/2015 7:54:00 AM

This evokes so many emotions, anger, sadness, fear, disgust...very well written on a controversial topic. Grats on your win

Tim Ryerson

Date: 9/18/2015 2:14:00 AM

WOW, my friend...You have proven that you can write about ANYTHING on any subject. I can feel the terror and shame of this little girl and the see the so called father 'grinning under a sinister moon'...I once read that the majority of female prostitutes and porn stars were sexually molested and that there is no 'cure' for rapists, molesters or pedophiles...Thanks for this and congrats - Tim

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 9/17/2015 10:57:00 PM

Brilliant take on theme nette! No wonder it's a top place win!Big congrats!

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 9/17/2015 6:24:00 PM

this was vying with ian's for first place! a very disturbing depiction of the sexual abuse of a child, and although harrowing it still has the sparkle of your unique imagery - congrats on your win in my contest, nette

Paul Callus

Date: 9/17/2015 5:49:00 PM

A controversial poem dealing with sexual abuse which, for various reasons, very often remains unexposed. A powerful write tackled with ability and dignity; the ending speaks volumes. #7 Hugs // paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 9/13/2015 11:38:00 PM

and people say I tackle the tough subjects!! Thank God, that by shining a light on this horrid action, we can tackle the issue and teach children to speak out, for this reason yes it happens less and less, but one time is one too many. Nette this is a winner in my eyes, and an A7.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/12/2015 3:07:00 PM

WOW, strong poem, Nette. I really like it! Should do very well with Charlotte. I just don't have much controversy style in my soul when it comes to poetry.

Manny Paras

Date: 9/12/2015 2:59:00 PM

Woman, I was almost wrecked when I got to the last lines. You really sting subtly, then boldly; very effective it made me shiver. These men must be chained. I gotta hail you for this extraordinary poem!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/12/2015 2:43:00 PM

- This is so sad ..... I have no words ..... - Best wishes for contest and a beautiful weekend, Nette :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Norma Arana

Date: 9/12/2015 2:36:00 PM

Seriously, this twisted 'crime' happens and we just look away. A riveting, wrenching verse which brings me to mindful awareness of relational issues with your brave quill.

Carly Lalion

Date: 9/12/2015 2:19:00 PM

A difficult, sensitive theme which you tackled with elan. The pauses, stutters of lines, the movement of action --all these well formed.Really a vile act and still, an excellent poem.

Bl Devnath

Date: 9/12/2015 2:07:00 PM

Extreme sad picture is adorned excellently. There's something which can't be answered but can be felt sure. When darkness slides on mental frame what happens in such situation she knows only. Unexpected unpleasant and unwavering situation of helpless girl, i feel here. Good luck in the contest, my lovely friend. Loved always,bl