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Written on April 15th 2025 for Kai Michael Neumann's Happily Discontent
Leaden clouds sweep swiftly in from the north, Blanketing the sapphire skies in melancholy. Deafening, rolling thunder cracks As a mysterious chill sends a shudder up my spine. A faint knock rasps at my front door; Whispers circulate, ringing through my walls, Echoing my name ever so sinisterly. For twenty and twenty years, I have been happily discontent, Freezing my sins in lovely seclusion. Now, a dank darkness drapes this dilapidated sanctuary. Peering out the curtains, I see death's arrival— Ruby red roses in my formerly lush garden Crumbling to ash, fading into the earth. Elongated fingers peek through the dubious haze. A cackling booms. To my right stands an ornate Victorian mirror. Turning my head, I can see the flames of Hell rage. What was once just a plane of glass Has now become a beckoning portal. Without hesitation, I rip it off the wall, Smashing the omen, trying to escape an unfathomable fate. Within seconds, it's fully reconstructed, Signaling there is no reprieve.

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Date: 5/18/2025 7:45:00 AM
Dear Sara, I enjoyed the dark, ominous ambience of your verse. Your intriguing imagery brings me to the center of the doomful scene with ease. Congratulations for your success in Kai's contest. Warmest wishes, dear poet.. ~Susan
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Date: 4/21/2025 8:56:00 AM
NICE! I finally found a dark poet besides myself. I love this, but I feel there is more to it. I'd love to know what happens next!
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Sara Jama
Date: 4/21/2025 9:13:00 AM
Thank you very much.
Date: 4/16/2025 1:35:00 PM
oh wow, what a frightful ending for someone who is doomed to hell. GREAT atmosphere, Sara, and description.
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Sara Jama
Date: 4/16/2025 1:49:00 PM
Thank you so much.
Date: 4/15/2025 3:50:00 PM
The vivid imagery and haunting tone leave me both in awe and shaken. You are a master of the macabre—deliciously dark, as always. My Onyx Rose
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Sara Jama
Date: 4/16/2025 1:48:00 PM
Thank you my love.
Date: 4/15/2025 10:10:00 AM
Grumpy, did you just add a little more digits to your age? I mean 20 plus 20! Ah and what a brilliant and descriptive poem this is, suits also your last contest that you sponsored, and i love especially the opening lines in this and introspective touch of your word weaving along with lines such as "Turning my head, I can see the flames of Hell rage. What was once just a plane of glass Has now become a beckoning portal. " the depth! And emotive manner youv woven metaphors is impeccable! Soul hitting! Best wishes for the contest! Sending you light always
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Sara Jama
Date: 4/16/2025 1:48:00 PM
Thank you Ink.
Date: 4/15/2025 9:49:00 AM
It seems death will not allow itself to be forestalled once its course is set. Your descriptive lines are more than just a titch scary, Sara.
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Date: 4/16/2025 1:48:00 PM
Thank you very much. I'm a fan of horror, I think it showed in my writing. Lol

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