Daisies and Clorox

This silent heave grows much too thin
when this dreary night is ripped by transient stars
and black fire.  I bleed, bleed and rake
like if I never belonged to a world 
now made from recycled
apathy---piles of rusty acid in the rain--- 
where the god-forsaken screen 
of days are holed by mangled rays .
Should I run on byways where fetal
trees never lived, clipped by axes
and formed as decorated beds?

Even daisies grow under the tyranny
of Ash Wednesdays riddled with Clorox
from urban laundry. I tell myself,
the air I breathe is soot and mud: my skin
grilled in toxic regret: damn, how often
can moments linger in July's  charms
when I'm deprived of the thrill
of summer's lust in an age of ice?
My eyes grow sullen, lonely...
I stand outside waiting for some kind 
of fresh wind to taste my frozen tears. 

Desolate  desolate  me.
I bow to this final  amen of glory be ,
as the linings of my soul defrocks itself
to feel the naked peel of virgin stars.



Skat A's Slam The Slam Contest
by nette onclaud

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 8/29/2014 7:02:00 AM
I like the message in a nut shell, nette. congrats
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Date: 8/28/2014 11:32:00 AM
Nette, Congratulation, on your awesome win. Thanks for the support. Loving ~SKAT~
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Date: 6/10/2014 8:06:00 PM
There is nothing ever ordinary in your amazing poetry.....even the title drew me by my immediate curiousity....and of course I was not disappointed!
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Date: 6/8/2014 3:19:00 AM
summer's lust in an age of ice.... wow! this line is so sad................ and a deal of reality in our world now... the last two lines portrays meekness of a great deal....
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Date: 6/4/2014 3:04:00 PM
The well thought title is a true warning bell for the peril our delicate planet is in. Your poem follows through. Love the last stanza ...bowing to glory be because no matter our ptotests the greedy will continue to ravage the innocent. Love, SuZ
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Date: 6/4/2014 3:50:00 AM
Unique work for sure..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 6/3/2014 3:39:00 PM
gosh, what a unique poem, even for you, nette. You have added some amazing imagery to a poem having an ecological message. Just loved those last few lines.
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Date: 6/3/2014 3:23:00 PM
A very timely message for the world we live in, Nette. You've done a great job with this!
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Date: 6/3/2014 3:20:00 PM
You had me on the edge of my seat waiting to see what you were going to say next and I loved it. Heal the world!
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Date: 6/3/2014 3:11:00 PM
Well,here's to another style that you've mastered, and how! This poem builds up intensity through repetition of phrases ; a clear show of poetic beat!
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Date: 6/3/2014 2:16:00 PM
Nette I think you have excelled yourself with this excellent write, the images are wonderful if a bit scary but a vision of what we create, very well done....David
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