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the smell of Carmel corn fills the air – I think of you Dad your hand in mine, four steps to your one the carousel music scores happiness bells of laughter ting-a-ling-ing Cotton candy, pink as bazooka bubble gum, melts to sugary paste on teeth and tongue you are there Dad, hanky in hand spit bathing my four year old cheeks moon-faced, eyes crinkled lifted skyward as the horses stop I pick the girlie one but sit straddled you pinch my knees and pull down my skirt muscle man strong -- your hands strap me in they rest after on the small of my back as I rise then I come [the brass pole all gummy from my hands] last week we walked the country fair my hand now as big as yours aged like two apple dolls, we meander you buy me cotton candy spit on your thumb and wipe it from my cheek

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Date: 10/3/2014 6:51:00 PM
Absolutely love this poem. So nice to read your work again. Take care Sincerely Lee
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Date: 10/3/2014 4:01:00 PM
So gorgeous, Bet :D four steps to one (loved that) but it isthe apple dolls which is the icing on the cake. (oddly, I was just thinking of apple dolls today and mentioned it to my girl :D ) Congrats hon. This one made me smile and get teary eyed.
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Date: 9/29/2014 8:13:00 AM
Beautifully written with so much imagery...it took me back to my childhood with my dad..thanks for the memories :) Ana
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Date: 9/26/2014 10:29:00 PM
Wonderful piece,great write..Congrats on your win...Light and love...
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Date: 9/26/2014 10:03:00 PM
Memories so well depicted in ur awesome write Debbie! I can well relate to this, I too m a daddies girl! Congrats on big win!
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Date: 9/26/2014 9:44:00 PM
Thank you so so so much for entering my contest. I love your poem and send you many congratulations on winning. I posted a blog on the contest called Free Verse Winners and I hope you stop by. Thank you again for entering with this lovely poem. Love and prayers, Gina
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Date: 9/26/2014 5:06:00 PM
Congratulations again on this beautiful poem Debbie
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Date: 9/24/2014 7:29:00 PM
oh my....that last stanza "apple dolls"....everything about it, perfect ! Very sweet this is! :)
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Date: 9/24/2014 5:25:00 PM
beautifully painted excellent piece of writing debbie god bless
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Date: 9/24/2014 2:16:00 PM
Congratulations on poem of the day Debbie. I enjoyed going to the fair with you in this wonderful poem and beautiful memory.
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Date: 9/24/2014 10:31:00 AM
Beautiful Debbie. I forgot about bazooka gum, I hated the flavour but wanted the comic strip. Congratulations, a well deserved choice.
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Date: 9/24/2014 6:15:00 AM
Congratulations for this hymn to daddy and to early childhood! It could be better written, dear Debbie!
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Date: 9/24/2014 4:57:00 AM
Excellent! Congratulations. A well deserved pick.
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Date: 9/24/2014 2:26:00 AM
I'm so pleased to see this wonderful poem as poem of the day - many congrats Debbie:-) hugs Jan xxx
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Date: 9/23/2014 3:46:00 PM
That is one feeling I.always wished to share with dad ,but due to his ill depression He was never,and still isnt able to.give such affection.Though I never experienced such feeling,I do find happiness watching my daughter with her dad,and yes,I can understand your feeling deae lady.This is so beautiful,I want to favor it-Big hugs ma.
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Date: 9/23/2014 2:41:00 PM
a simply delightful write full of wonderful imagery Debbie - i was transported back to the fairground! Hugs Jan xxx
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