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Daddies Girl

the smell of Carmel corn 
fills the air – I think of you Dad
your hand in mine, four steps to your one
the carousel music scores happiness
bells of laughter ting-a-ling-ing

Cotton candy, pink as bazooka bubble gum,
melts to sugary paste on teeth and tongue
you are there Dad, hanky in hand
spit bathing my four year old cheeks
moon-faced, eyes crinkled

lifted skyward as the horses stop
I pick the girlie one but sit straddled
you pinch my knees and pull down my skirt
muscle man strong --  your hands strap me in
they rest after on the small of my back as I rise
then I come [the brass pole all gummy
from my hands]

last week we walked the country fair
my hand now as big as yours
aged like two apple dolls, we meander
you buy me cotton candy
spit on your thumb and wipe
it from my cheek
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Ramage Avatar
October 3, 2014 at 6:51 PM
Absolutely love this poem. So nice to read your work again. Take care Sincerely Lee
Macmillan Avatar
October 3, 2014 at 4:01 PM
So gorgeous, Bet :D four steps to one (loved that) but it isthe apple dolls which is the icing on the cake. (oddly, I was just thinking of apple dolls today and mentioned it to my girl :D ) Congrats hon. This one made me smile and get teary eyed.
Espinola Collins Avatar
September 29, 2014 at 8:13 AM
Beautifully written with so much imagery...it took me back to my childhood with my dad..thanks for the memories :) Ana
Arowolo Avatar
September 26, 2014 at 10:29 PM
Wonderful piece,great write..Congrats on your win...Light and love...
A. Sharma Avatar
September 26, 2014 at 10:03 PM
Memories so well depicted in ur awesome write Debbie! I can well relate to this, I too m a daddies girl! Congrats on big win!
Mcintosh Avatar
September 26, 2014 at 9:44 PM
Thank you so so so much for entering my contest. I love your poem and send you many congratulations on winning. I posted a blog on the contest called Free Verse Winners and I hope you stop by. Thank you again for entering with this lovely poem. Love and prayers, Gina
Meier-Hans Avatar
September 26, 2014 at 5:06 PM
Congratulations again on this beautiful poem Debbie
Richards Avatar
September 24, 2014 at 7:29 PM
oh my....that last stanza "apple dolls"....everything about it, perfect ! Very sweet this is! :)
Mcdaid Avatar
September 24, 2014 at 5:25 PM
beautifully painted excellent piece of writing debbie god bless
Meier-Hans Avatar
September 24, 2014 at 2:16 PM
Congratulations on poem of the day Debbie. I enjoyed going to the fair with you in this wonderful poem and beautiful memory.
Lamoureux Avatar
September 24, 2014 at 10:31 AM
Beautiful Debbie. I forgot about bazooka gum, I hated the flavour but wanted the comic strip. Congratulations, a well deserved choice.
Trifiatis Avatar
September 24, 2014 at 6:15 AM
Congratulations for this hymn to daddy and to early childhood! It could be better written, dear Debbie!
Yvonne Avatar
September 24, 2014 at 4:57 AM
Excellent! Congratulations. A well deserved pick.
Allison Avatar
September 24, 2014 at 2:26 AM
I'm so pleased to see this wonderful poem as poem of the day - many congrats Debbie:-) hugs Jan xxx
Chircop Avatar
September 23, 2014 at 3:46 PM
That is one feeling I.always wished to share with dad ,but due to his ill depression He was never,and still isnt able to.give such affection.Though I never experienced such feeling,I do find happiness watching my daughter with her dad,and yes,I can understand your feeling deae lady.This is so beautiful,I want to favor it-Big hugs ma.
Allison Avatar
September 23, 2014 at 2:41 PM
a simply delightful write full of wonderful imagery Debbie - i was transported back to the fairground! Hugs Jan xxx
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