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Consciousness Correction

Consciousness Correction – 11-20-23 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Consciousness Correction Envy sneaks in unseen A thief robbing light from my house of gratitude, Sowing simmering anger, extinguishing thankfulness, In blind yellowed views Gratitude held captive, Strangled, Pennies of “I wish” tossed into stone cisterns Where winter thrashes cyclconic - Vortex of a gleeful witness to spring’s demise - Dead-ends swell in jealous broken branches, Wrapped in near sighted stigmatisms, Lenses smeared in covet. Stone citadels rise from my naked spite, Blind to confessions of incense, To curl into deep pools Poisoned by tainted pools of jealousy, Creeping to the heights of entitled grudges. Yet nascent vines, fragrant with focal points, Blooms of correction, Slip between crumbling buttress mortars, Sachets illuminate good will In wreaths of newborn appreciation That knows its need for candles of kindness My thankful eyes, that walked in darkness, see To embrace armloads of miracles come into focus Reappearing from soot blown corners. Scales fall in melting flakes From my bloodshot eyes, New sight nourished in a corrected wash - Sweet nectar of reckoning By a brilliant polestar of clarity magnified Opaque about-face.

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Date: 11/30/2023 3:51:00 PM
I am blessed by the reading your exceptional words, Sam. I cannot truly convey my thoughts as eloquently as you, whereto, you're unrivalled. I do not envy US's call in this contest. My compliments, hoa'aloha nui. Aloha, William
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Date: 11/30/2023 8:09:00 AM
Sam, it's clear to see why your poem placed so high in the contest. I admire every thought you so skillfully brought to light. Congratulations on your winning entry. Hugs!
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Date: 11/30/2023 7:36:00 AM
Back with Congratulations on your wonderful win. I enjoyed reading your "Consciousness Correction" write again with your great ending.  Have a wonderful/blessed day with your win................
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 11/30/2023 11:58:00 AM
Thank you so much Paula! This theme lead me into a wonderful exploration into the blessings of new insights and the ways they have lead me into new lands of inspiration. Blessings and my gratitude!
Date: 11/30/2023 6:09:00 AM
Sam, You wrote insightful and passionate poetry. This piece is filled with emotion. I appreciate how the first simile compares envy to a burglar stealing gratitude's shine. While envy is natural among foes, it is ethically reprehensible, but those who profess care for us while concealing symbolic daggers are the most painful. Your poem is thoughtful and well-crafted. Hearty congratulations on your well-earned win, dear friend.
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Date: 11/30/2023 5:38:00 AM
Incredible piece. I so enjoyed reading it. Congratulations on your medal finish.
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 11/30/2023 10:23:00 AM
Thank you so much, Richard. Writing this poem was a revelation in itself - a gift! Gratitude and blessings to you!
Date: 11/25/2023 4:58:00 AM
Jealousy and envying is a form of disease really that can truly cloud ones judgment. It takes a lot of consciousness to be aware of all these emotions and to correct your sight . I really love so many lines in this. So profound and very well articulated with such brilliant diction. I love your metaphors. I especially love the lines “ Pennies of “I wish” tossed into stone cisterns“ “thankful eyes, walked in darkness- To embrace armloads of miracles “ a thankful heart always receives more. FAVE
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 11/30/2023 10:57:00 AM
Greetings dear Inky! I am so honored by your fave and by your in-depth understanding of this poem! Thank you many times over for reading my poems but also for your intrinsic understanding of their meaning. What a gift to be able to share hearts with a friend and fellow poetic seeker! Sending you my gratitude and blessings!!
Date: 11/24/2023 6:28:00 PM
WOW! Sam, this was frank and amazing. Enjoyed!
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 11/28/2023 11:50:00 AM
Thank you so much, Paige! This poem was definitely a study in personal growth! Blessings!
Date: 11/22/2023 8:44:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your "Consciousness Correction" write/great ending. Good Luck... Looks like we both did this one. Have a wonderful day writing away.............
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 11/29/2023 11:11:00 AM
Paula, sending you my gratitude for your lovely compliments. Thank you. Best wishes to you for the contest. Fun that we both chose to write on this theme. Blessings!
Date: 11/21/2023 4:00:00 PM
Well said and so beautifully expressed Sam. The emotion here is strong. Loved every word. \Well done my friend. God Bless, JB
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 11/28/2023 11:41:00 AM
Thank you so much, Judy! I think this contest brought to light the powerful emotions of anger, hate, envy, jealousy and let the light of grace expose them and their disastrous effects on us and people around us. Indeed we are blessed by the grace of correction and renewal! Blessings to you and my gratitude!!
Date: 11/21/2023 3:36:00 PM
I loved the 'opague about-face.' Such a powerful image. Your poem was intense with a host of emotional images searching for consciousness correction. I especially liked these lines: My thankful eyes, that walked in darkness, see To embrace armloads of miracles come into focus Reappearing from soot blown corners. Wonderfully and masterfully done! enjoy your evening, Sara
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Date: 11/21/2023 2:51:00 PM
Ahhh that sweet nectar of reckoning, of clarity, even discipline. Envy, jealously, rottenness to the bones. Nice entry Sam
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 11/29/2023 10:31:00 AM
Hi Tom! You are so right. Those moments of new perceptions, clarity, are a "sweet nectar." I like the way you put that! So glad you liked this one. It was a sweet exploration into the way new "consciousness" brings a unique kind of joy to us - a new confidence! Sending you my gratitude and blessings!!
Date: 11/21/2023 2:47:00 PM
I am amazed how you started this, really love the analogy at the beginning: Envy sneaks in unseen A thief robbing light from my house of gratitude.. Envy from enemies is understandable, although wrong, it is when those who claim to love us, envy us in secret holding daggers behind their back which is the worst thing... you poem is written very well and full of wisdom.. excellent choice for this contest.
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 11/29/2023 10:28:00 AM
Hi SO! You are so right! Envy and jealousy rob us of the ability to think creatively and focus us on what we think will make us happy or fulfilled instead of being able to see our blessings! And envy is different from goal setting - a journey into positive thinking of possibility. Thank you so much for your gracious feedback and your support. Glad you like this as an entry. Writing it was a journey into a new awareness! Sending you blessings and my gratitude!

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