Cold

Your coldness is like a heavy frost crusting the earth- Cool, pristine crystalline covering delicate yet unyielding hardening the surface- A thin disguise over the muddy mess we were before

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/15/2018 8:25:00 PM

I really enjoyed this one that i think was your second offering here at Soup. Great poem, Rhona.

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 11/15/2018 9:06:00 PM

Thank you! I remember composing this in my head while walking my dog one particularly icy morning... it's a good thing it was short, or I probably wouldn't have remembered it by the time I wrote it down! ;) hahaha

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 9/15/2018 2:35:00 PM

Evocative, like 'crystalline covering' and 'delicate yet unyielding,' this is striking-

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 9/15/2018 11:20:00 PM

Thank you so much! ;)

Lyric Man

Date: 7/26/2018 5:18:00 AM

Rhona.. I love what that last stanza does for this write!!

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 7/26/2018 9:13:00 PM

Thank you! This poem came to me after a particularly huge snowfall melted and made a horrible mess of my yard... then the next morning it was all sparkly with the frost- reminding me of relationships gone cold and silent (the thin disguise).