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A Thawing of Hearts - For Contest

I sat quietly and waited, making the noises he had come to know, calling him in his newly given name. His face would appear, cautiously calculating my intent, he would approach. The promise of food and gentle touch too much to deny. And so we did the “Little Prince’s” taming dance, each aware of the other and the possibility of betrayal.
cold eyes, empty heart frost forming on life’s edges winter’s numbing kiss
Our meetings continued, less cautious greetings, more welcome contact, minimal conversation. His coat was becoming more ragged in spite of attempts to keep it up, his gait slowing as our good-byes became short walks together. He could not leave his place, his home, even though it had left him – alone, to fend for himself.
hoarfrost in retreat sunrise gently awakens friendships warming blood
He withdrew – I would wait, quietly, whisper the name he had come to know, make the sounds that signaled “all clear”. I searched for him, stood silent and listened for his weakening call, shed tears in the cold rain of November. His last call, a feeble attempt at good-bye, led me to him. Alone, cold, hungry, he lay there, rolled his eyes as I cradled his cold and fading spirit. He shivered – and left.
winter’s cold cradle ice encasing a friendship a thawing of hearts
10/20/2015 submitted to – Creative Haibuns – Poetry Contest sponsor – Charlotte Jade Puddifoot

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Date: 12/1/2015 8:56:00 PM
OK - I've read every comment and seem to be the only one who HAS to know what kind of animal was in your write! Did everyone else figure it out? I'm thinking wolf, but I NEED to know! Your writing is compelling and impressive, you are indeed a talent. Congratulations and please tell me! CayCay
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John Lawless
Date: 12/1/2015 9:21:00 PM
CayCay, nothing so dramatic as a wolf. It was a cat that was abandoned by its "family" when they moved and left it behind. People told me to stay away from it because it was vicious. However, I employed the Little Prince's lesson on "how to tame a fox" and it worked.
Date: 12/1/2015 4:33:00 PM
Congrats, John. Indeed creative.
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John Lawless
Date: 12/1/2015 9:18:00 PM
Thanks John
Date: 11/29/2015 11:05:00 PM
Good job! Congrats! That was amazing!
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John Lawless
Date: 12/1/2015 9:17:00 PM
Thanks for reading and commenting Jacob
Date: 11/29/2015 8:47:00 AM
Congratulations on your well-deserved First Place win, John. Heartfelt and beautifully written. Sandra
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John Lawless
Date: 12/1/2015 9:17:00 PM
Thanks Sandra
Date: 11/28/2015 7:43:00 PM
Wow, no wonder this was a Number 1 !! Well done, John..... This tears at the heart ..with tenderness. :)
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John Lawless
Date: 12/1/2015 9:17:00 PM
Thanks Carrie, I still walk past our "rendezvous" spot and reflect on our time...
Date: 11/28/2015 3:12:00 PM
:) A nice and creative win. Love SKAT
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John Lawless
Date: 12/1/2015 9:15:00 PM
thanks SKAT
Date: 11/28/2015 6:53:00 AM
I'm tweeting links to the winners of this great contest.
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Scott Thirtyseven
Date: 12/2/2015 5:14:00 PM
Twitter is a bit like face book, but far more targeted towards promoting (in my case poetry). Some people's tweets might be like sending out a flock of carrier pigeons, my tweets are more like strapping a note to a rock.
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John Lawless
Date: 12/1/2015 9:15:00 PM
Thanks Scott...I'm not sure what that means...does it involve carrier pigeons?
Date: 11/27/2015 12:45:00 PM
Oh John, your haiku in this poem are so powerful and they intergrate so beautifully with your story causing heartfelt emotions to rise. Excellent! Congratulations my friend! #7
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John Lawless
Date: 11/27/2015 7:28:00 PM
Thank you Connie for the kind words and high mark. It was not an easy write......but so few really are.....
Date: 11/27/2015 9:33:00 AM
This is just one terrific poem, John. Congrats and continued wins!
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John Lawless
Date: 11/27/2015 7:28:00 PM
Thanks Dan, appreciate your taking the time to read and comment
Date: 11/27/2015 6:48:00 AM
A well deserved win. You have crafted a tender, engaging, heart string tugging, poem. Good onya mate.
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John Lawless
Date: 11/27/2015 7:27:00 PM
Thanks Scott, I appreciate the high praise..
Date: 11/27/2015 2:53:00 AM
John, this really an excellent haibun... sad and really heavy one but well-deserve win! congrats!!~Olive Eloisa =`)
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John Lawless
Date: 11/27/2015 7:27:00 PM
Olive, I still walk those same streets and slow at the spots where we would meet.
Date: 11/26/2015 11:39:00 PM
Congrats on your win John! Well deserved-Laura
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John Lawless
Date: 11/27/2015 7:26:00 PM
Thanks You Laura...
Date: 11/26/2015 9:29:00 PM
Exquisite write John.. Congrats on much deserved first place win!!
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John Lawless
Date: 11/27/2015 7:25:00 PM
Thanks Dr. Sharma I appreciate your reading and comment on my work
Date: 11/26/2015 3:06:00 PM
John, I am blown away by this one... You are a very talented prose writer. You definitely pulled at my heartstrings with this one. Congrats!!
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John Lawless
Date: 11/26/2015 9:01:00 PM
Thank you for your kind words Heather
Date: 11/26/2015 12:15:00 PM
Beautifully written prose, John. Wonderful content and great supportive Haiku.
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John Lawless
Date: 11/26/2015 9:01:00 PM
Thank You James for stopping to read and comment
Date: 11/26/2015 10:31:00 AM
Congrats John for this emotional haibun!
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John Lawless
Date: 11/26/2015 8:58:00 PM
Thanks Balveen for stopping by to read and comment
Date: 11/26/2015 10:04:00 AM
Congratulations John on this so well written and most deserved top tier win.
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John Lawless
Date: 11/26/2015 8:58:00 PM
Thanks Robert, always nice to hear from you.
Date: 11/26/2015 8:59:00 AM
Tremendous John...big congrats on this well written heart twister
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John Lawless
Date: 11/26/2015 8:57:00 PM
Thank You David.
Date: 11/26/2015 6:40:00 AM
you tugged at the heartstrings with this write - many congrats John:-) hugs jan xx7
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John Lawless
Date: 11/26/2015 8:57:00 PM
Thanks Jan for stopping by to comment and for the high marks.
Date: 11/26/2015 6:29:00 AM
this was so poignant and elegantly written; you didn't over-write it, which people tend to do sometimes with this sort of subject matter, and the haiku complement the prose beautifully - congrats on your 1st place win in my contest!
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John Lawless
Date: 11/26/2015 8:56:00 PM
Thanks Charlotte for the high placement in the contest. I appreciate the time and effort it takes to administer a contest of this nature.
Date: 10/22/2015 2:09:00 PM
What a magnificent, heart wrenching haibun, John! As an enthusiastic animal lover, this piece tugged at my maternal emotions, as I felt grieved at the loss of this dear animal friend. A fave and a 7. Should dominate the contest (I hope it does!)
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John Lawless
Date: 10/24/2015 9:07:00 AM
Thanks Laura. It seemed he had more loyalty to the home that left him than they had to him. Appreciate the "fav" and the seven and your taking the time to read and comment.
Date: 10/20/2015 4:13:00 PM
I saw this as an example of the form in research for the contest.... This blew me away and touched my heart.. I will not be attempting it, but hope to see this high on the winners list.. A 7 from me dear friend.. Faving this one!...
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John Lawless
Date: 10/24/2015 9:06:00 AM
Thank You for the high marks and the "fav" Arlene. Thanks for stopping by to comment
Date: 10/20/2015 3:29:00 PM
Tears are falling...mine. This pulled at my heart, John. Your wrote this with so much emotion...thank you for sharing. ~ Lin ~
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John Lawless
Date: 10/24/2015 9:02:00 AM
Lin, I still walk past the spot where we would meet each evening and stop....and fight the tears

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