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A Beautiful Fleeting Life

Great beauty did Rose have since that time when she poked her head out and beheld the sun, which had been helping her to grow and then, she noticed in her bed there was no one except for her! For a brief moment, Rose was all alone, a queen who stood with grace with her crimson hue and in sweet repose, enticing bees that circled near her face, taking nectar from petals’ base. Aglow, Rose loved being desired . . . but now has come wilting time. Her blossom tears – unseen – flow. A flower’s reign is fleeting, and no bees’ hum will Rose now hear. One floral leaf lets loose. As the petal falls, she knows she’s lost her use.

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Date: 3/13/2025 11:03:00 PM
This seems so tragic. But what a beautifully written poem!
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Date: 3/4/2025 12:00:00 PM
I love your theme in this sonnet Andrea. I loved this write of yours. I am definitely favoring this well written sad piece from you creating life in the Rose and sharing her feelings and thoughts. Well done!!! Loved this one, another favorite today two in a row wow. Hugs...
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/4/2025 12:39:00 PM
thanks again. I had fun writing this one
Date: 3/4/2025 5:46:00 AM
beautiful sonnet Andy but so sad poor Rose I love roses and have many in my garden hugs Shadow
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/4/2025 12:40:00 PM
I only have roses. I love how they grow right back and need little tending!
Date: 3/3/2025 7:43:00 PM
It is so worrying when the end comes and we find that life is short,and that beauty and youthfulness are temporal.This is an excellent lyrical poem
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/4/2025 12:40:00 PM
thanks so much
Date: 3/3/2025 6:36:00 PM
Andrea, hey it's an allegory for our lives too. I'm reading the comments and so I learned the term enjambment. It's not bad to know the vocab for what we're doing. Nice job you did here. Smiles!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/4/2025 12:40:00 PM
thanks. Yes, the enjambment word I would not have learned if I had not taken a poetry class years ago.
Date: 3/3/2025 6:35:00 PM
Wonderful write and sad Andrea. One alone is not good for roses or people
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/4/2025 12:41:00 PM
thanks, Oliver
Date: 3/3/2025 5:35:00 PM
Beautiful and sad
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/4/2025 12:41:00 PM
thanks, David
Date: 3/3/2025 3:43:00 PM
Ahhh!! A good one that speaks in so many ways about aging, death, lost love, and the emotions that loom when one sees the demise of their beauty. Thanks for sharing this metaphorical and analytical work. Sara K
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/4/2025 12:42:00 PM
thanks so much, Sara
Date: 3/3/2025 3:20:00 PM
Andrea, my mother's name was Rose. She left this world long ago and left her mark with many people in many wonderful ways and memories. You would have loved her and she would have loved you and this poem as well because she loved poetry and gardening, and her favorite flowers were the rose (of course) and hibiscus. This poem reminds me very much of her because it is uplifting and splendiferous as was she. Thank you for a wonderful poem and even more wonderful memories.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/4/2025 12:43:00 PM
wow, she sounds wonderful. And she got a GOOD name. Thanks, Terrell.
Date: 3/3/2025 12:54:00 PM
I agree with Ink Empress you are a queen of sonnet writing, I shy away from the form, your poem flows so beautifully:-) hugs Jan xx
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/3/2025 12:54:00 PM
Aww, you are so sweet, Jan. Thanks.
Date: 3/3/2025 12:01:00 PM
Dear sweet andrea queen of sonnets you are! Im so proud to know and to have met poets like you that are so talented! I am in awe of your way with words here especially the cadence and rhythm of words woven here! The endinv made me feel so sad for some reason! Sigh! Theres alot conveyed here in this! Well done! Best wishes! Sending you light today and always. I just posted for this too
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/3/2025 12:54:00 PM
thanks, Ink, I just wish my sonnets could compete with really well-written free verse, like you so often come up with. The rose represents how fleeting our own lives are, and that's what makes it sad. But you know, we must have hope in the afterlife!!
Date: 3/3/2025 11:14:00 AM
It's well written, Andrea. You often use enjambment, which I'm not a fan of, but that's what makes poetry so much more interesting.
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/4/2025 12:54:00 PM
Andrea, I was just teasing you. ;-)
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/4/2025 12:45:00 PM
No, I was not implying you were not sophisticated. Your free verse is much more sophisticated than mine, Lin. I'm just saying the publisher who looked at my sonnets a long time ago had told me that enjambment is actually a great tool for rhymers, but I guess not many rhyming poets like to use it.
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/3/2025 2:06:00 PM
I guess my writing is considered unsophisticated then. Lol. Write what you feel comfortable with and never doubt yourself. Don’t be sure your entry won’t be a winner. Good luck!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/3/2025 11:36:00 AM
yeah, I think Craig does not like enjambment either, but it's considered sophisticated by some circles of poetry groups. I never even knew about it until a few years into writing when a publisher told me to stop using antiquated language (reversing the normal order of words) and to not be afraid of enjambment. I am sure I won't win, but I had fun writing this.
Date: 3/3/2025 11:03:00 AM
What a lovely Rose write/story. "Good Luck" We both did this one. Have a blessed day writing away................
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/3/2025 12:55:00 PM
thanks, and good luck to you too, sweetie.

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