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""As I lay silent, burden free
I asked the world to join with me

With my tongue planted firmly in my cheek
I offered answers for the poor and meek

Beware the guilt ridden, for theirs is the earthly kingdom
where starved and thirsty creatures come to drink

from a Fountain not of their making,
but will forever be offered them just the same.

I asked my brothers to forgive a harmless illusion
instead it was me the Romans chose to shun.

I asked my brothers to know the one true Boss
instead they strung me high up on this...well you know...

Because I held such a controversial stance
My 'church' made certain nothing was left to chance

They warped my endless love and set my words on fire......""



For this next rhyme, I think I'll go with 'desire'.

Hell no I'm not Jesus, I never said I was.
I'm only pretending I know what he would say, just because

sooner or later his real message has to be heard
I'm just doing my part by spreading the word

Hopefully I got it right but probably not
I'm no visionary, I'm just tired of being a robot

I have no idea what Jesus would say...
I write bad poems since I never learned to pray

I don't know what would Jesus do...
Every time I ask him, all I hear is 'I love you'.

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/10/2010 2:28:00 PM

about your comment, i truly enjoyed it. lol,,i think many read the poem thinking it would be based on me,,,no not by chance thanks GOD. i based it upon reality around the news in my town.Many suicides are the devils work,an errie feeling.. Loved your comment, glad you understood the free write.,, and new where i was comming from..To answer about my name, i am harmless, but many take it upon them selfs to slam me,, so i let them and enjoy the ride, and return their slams,more effetive, later,p.d.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/10/2010 2:16:00 PM

pretty awesome yourself.. I call these form couplets..You did an awesome job..I love the way you questioned the question of our newest time.. What would Jesus do,, lol,,i want to know to,,enjoyed,,i will continue my comment,, on a thank you from a comment you made on my **master suicide**,..p.d,

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/4/2009 4:58:00 PM

Hey buddy you are amazing! the only one who got the tongue in cheek of my Charging Around and me mocking my swollen head LOL>And your verse above ....well man...I have always said...even though not a Christian...I have no disagreement with the metaphorical words of the Man...if only the followers would live by them. Light & Love

Edward Orozco

Date: 7/23/2009 10:23:00 PM

Awesome piece! - eddie

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 7/21/2009 7:56:00 PM

Forgot to ask how your vacation was. Hope you had a great time!

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 7/21/2009 7:55:00 PM

You never wear a mask, Yoni. Your thoughts and emotions always have the ring of truth. Few of us are visionaries, but you are certainly no robot. And you, my dear, HAVE learned to pray. Hearing the response, "I love you" is the best answer we can receive to our prayers. Love, Carolyn

Date: 7/18/2009 2:43:00 PM

Wonderful, inspirational message in this poem. Sounds like you've found what Jesus would do. Use your talent in an uplifting way. Blessings to you for sharing this poem with us. Karen

Sue Mason

Date: 7/15/2009 5:26:00 PM

Amen, Yoni. Thats EXACTLY all Jesus would say ... smile ... but everybody else has so twisted MY BROTHER that he is almost unrecognizable and as a Child of God, I resent that ... smile ... thanks so much for exploring my writing. So many just read the latest write (like I'm doing now ... smile) and its nice to reflect on things done some time ago. Maybe its time for Mystery IV ... LOL ... glad you are at the Soup!!

John Freeman

Date: 7/15/2009 3:06:00 PM

You've met the "elder in this one" Yoni, congratulations! Conglutinate the two with God's love!, Godly love Moses

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/13/2009 10:35:00 AM

You've GOT Mail

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/13/2009 10:15:00 AM

very good one...very good..in many cases irreverance IS reverance...I know your on the Dao since ego has stepped aside. Light, Love & Friendship always

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 7/12/2009 10:59:00 PM

Yoni,you're in my winning list too cos this write is great-you write good poems and you know how to pray,cos you ask him everytime and "He answers everytime-I love you"He loves us all,and even if our brothers,our most close ones leave us alone,He never will--i like the way you played wit this poem,sweet yet touching too-charma