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I wrote this poem about my brother who married a Filipina woman who did him very wrong,

The strange thing is I wrote it a few years before he fell in love with her and lost everything.

They say they are a 'pre-concieved' poem.

I've let it go now but I did try to warn him.

My brother is an osprey with an eagle arrogance And - although he adores a forest I have the ‘sauce’ on him - he abhors pine bathroom spray His eyes are fire opals of mirth His laughter - the dusk of an endless Summer heat His legs - straddle the valley of death I picture him in a strong canoe paddling through a river of garden flowers his spirit rising with swift wings- and the will to fall Suzanne Delaney

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Ricky Muse

Date: 6/30/2018 10:12:00 PM

Nice. So-so aesthetic. The bio adds to the irony in this poem.

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 7/2/2018 5:38:00 AM

Hi Rich: ...thanks for reading and commenting. SuZ

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/7/2014 10:12:00 AM

nice win...pd

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/28/2013 6:45:00 PM

If the fledgling does not try to fly, he will languish and die. It takes courage to fly. I hope he does well. We are all on our own karmic paths with the freedom to choose, win or lose. Didn't mean to rhyme this reply, it just came out that way.

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 1/1/2014 12:34:00 AM

Yes it is amazing what we absorb only to find it re- surfacing when we need it most. Here is a neat discussion from a book I am reading now which shows a suprising element, the complexity of pre-concieved poetry. From "Hope Abandoned by Nadezdha Mandelstam (p. 233) Talking about Osip Mandelstam (Russion Poet ) oppressed and killed by Stalin's Regime. " The sense of a poem, its latent meaning, is not always immediately apparent to the person who has composed it. "I often heard both Mendelstam and Akhmatova say that they now at last understood whom some poem or other was about- originally the poem had just "come" to them, without then knowing what or who had prompted it. Then, after a time, this would all suddenly come become clear.

Kathryn Collins

Date: 12/28/2013 8:50:00 AM

Dear Suz - That first stanza is a day-brightener for me - I am over the ocean flying. As I read further your metaphoric words become sad. "the will to fall" lvoe, Kathy

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/28/2013 6:05:00 PM

Hi Kathryn: He has moved away from the US to a remote area and married a younger woman with a ready-made family....if that isn't showing the will to fall I don't know what is. Strangely though, I wrote this long before it happened.