Why She Refused His Kiss

He drew her close and tried to paint a kiss on her soft cheek, angrily she refused,freed herself and closed the door on his face, her choked voice came from inside,'Where's my choco you promised, Dad?' =======================000===========================
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 2/13/2012 9:48:00 AM
hahaha, a kid's think, huh. As simple as that :)
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Date: 2/11/2012 12:43:00 AM
looks like i never congratulated you here, Kash. well, I will wait no longer for my superstitious reasons. haha. I entered one contest with a mediocre number but refuse to enter the other one until a much better number appears!! Goodnight my friend and thanks so much for bringing that one line to my attention. Your sijo at least deserved to win. I was awesome.
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Date: 2/3/2012 3:37:00 AM
ahahhhaa, kashi buddy... a promise to a kid cannot be broken.. so where's my candy??... greatt approach on the element of surprise.. winning huggs!.. come visit! :)
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Date: 2/3/2012 1:10:00 AM
The last line made me smile kash! Thanks for sharing. Dalila
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Date: 2/2/2012 9:55:00 PM
Kash... if this is for the contest... good luck... enjoyed..pd
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Date: 2/2/2012 9:29:00 PM
oh so very cute with emotion Kash.. good luck in the contest luv.. very visual ...
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Date: 2/2/2012 9:23:00 PM
hahaha, So cool, Kash. VEry clever entry for the kiss contest!! I could almost picture you having a little girl, but you have only the son, right?
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Date: 2/2/2012 8:03:00 PM
i was surprised by your ending! Lurrrvvv it! =) Good luck! This certainly will make it though! And thannks btw for your kind comment on my winning Sijo! More power!
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Date: 2/2/2012 6:25:00 PM
Precious!! nothing like a Dad's love for his girl and visa versa! Light & Love
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Date: 2/2/2012 3:50:00 PM
Wonderful read!! I love the twist! Blessings, Rhonda
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Date: 2/2/2012 1:27:00 PM
Nicely done.........George
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Date: 2/2/2012 1:05:00 PM
LOL, good one, Kash. Many congrats on your wins : )
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Date: 2/2/2012 12:22:00 PM
That is a very different one for sure..Sad to me..If for a contest, reads like a winner..Soup mail soon..Sara
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Date: 2/2/2012 11:00:00 AM
Ah, so did I get it right, it's his daughter after all? Very nice twist, since at first I thought it was between lovers-- Can I also suggest something, kash? I think it would help if you put a comma after the word "promised" to indicate a pause and that she was talking to her dad-- since without it, I read it as the chocolate was for the dad-- sorry, am I being weird? Just a suggestion :D
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Date: 2/2/2012 10:37:00 AM
A real twist to this one Kash. Well done
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