Fredrick

He is here He is angry He is attacking He wants to kill us Shaking the house Ripping up trees Blowing out windows Yes he is here He is awesome He is beautiful He is gone He is dying He will be back He has many names Sun is shining Gentle breezes All is at peace Yes he was here He was awesome He was beautiful

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Kim Merryman

Date: 10/7/2012 10:01:00 AM

Tim, I love how you wrote this, with short succinct lines. Made it more dramatic. Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/6/2012 11:12:00 PM

wow, Tim, I really like this. First time I saw it, I think. Well deserved win. Congratulations.

Joy Wellington

Date: 10/5/2012 9:01:00 PM

Nice write on Fredrick, Tim. Congrats on your win. One love. Joy Wells

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/5/2012 1:24:00 PM

Great way to go with the contest..Congrats on your win..Sara

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/5/2012 8:11:00 AM

TIM, congratulations with your awesome "Weather Forecast" poem in Joy's contest... have yourself a good day :-) Love PD

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 10/5/2012 5:59:00 AM

Belated congratulations once again, I am sorry these are late I am busy packing and shopping for my holidays xx

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/5/2012 5:21:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Joy's "Weather Forecast" contest Tim. Love Carol

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/5/2012 3:56:00 AM

I enjoyed your take on this contest Tim. Nature in all forms is beautiful, stirring up all kinds of emotions. Congratulations on your win!

Ann Roske

Date: 10/3/2012 3:55:00 PM

Nature's fury - it's pretty darn awesome to watch (from a distance). Nice piece.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 10/3/2012 3:30:00 PM

YIKE!!! yes there have ferocious beauty. Light & Love

Russell Sivey

Date: 10/3/2012 3:18:00 PM

I remember that hurricane, it was a bad one! This poem was very wonderful my friend! A very nicely written piece! What a powerful and dynamic write this one is! I loved this poem, Great Work!!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/3/2012 2:55:00 PM

Good day Tim, wow..Fredrick is quite the guy, who did not come in silently. A very touch image to accept, when the thunder and heavy rains are in effect,, but the after effect can be a glimpse of beauty, if you love nature.. enjoyed your entry, good luck. One other thing Tim, your comment on my "stillborn" means a lot to me. Thank you for sharing your heartfelt thought that moment. I had to endure myself the pain at an early age... You take care now,, xox~pd

Poet Destroyer A
Date: 10/3/2012 2:56:00 PM

typo,, tough,,, not touch... xox

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 10/3/2012 2:49:00 PM

Yes it will not be the first time and he or she will come time and time again over time. Nicely done. love phyl