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White For Mourning

He saw the failed rescue attempt Her whole body was white As white as the dress she had discarded on the riverbank He studied her still-beautiful still form Thrilled and repelled And cried for his bride Kissing her fish cold lips He crumpled the note she’d left And watched them take her away with his dreams For Anthony’s Whiteness contest

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 10/22/2012 9:26:00 PM

Oh so good..but I'd say [ice cold lips] the whole piece is so romantically maudlin..fish breaks the mood? Light & Love

Kathryn Collins

Date: 10/12/2012 9:47:00 AM

What a nightmare his dreams have become. "fish cold lips" gives me goose bumps. Very sad. love, Kathy

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 10/10/2012 9:02:00 AM

WOW JACK I AM BREATHLESS READING THIS SAD STORY SO WELL DEFINED .. WINNING WISHES LUV AND CONGRATS ON YOUR MANY SPLENDID WINS TOO ..

Terry O'Leary

Date: 10/9/2012 12:30:00 PM

Oooo... splendid poetic description... Good luck in the contest... Terry

Len Gasun

Date: 10/9/2012 1:25:00 AM

Awesome one my dear friend! Al though I feel the sadness here, i love it!! Good luck always for a big win!!! love and hugs:) Leonora

Joe Maverick

Date: 10/8/2012 2:14:00 PM

A sad poignant write Jack, with the flashes of word play that add to its theme ( best to you for that contest )

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/8/2012 12:40:00 AM

rereading this again. I just love it. And you were fine doing only one poem as I just discovered rereading his rules today.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/7/2012 4:01:00 PM

Well, this one is a winner for sure in Anthony's contest...A little sad..It reminds me of a movie that I watched here lately called Mrs. Galloway..Thanks for stopping by..Your comments were so uplifting.Sara

Russell Sivey

Date: 10/7/2012 2:38:00 PM

This is a chilling write my friend! I get the feeling of doom with this incredible poem! What a spectacular write for the contest! You've done excellent with this fearful write! Powerful piece, Great Work!!

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 10/7/2012 12:58:00 PM

Masterpiece Jack!! Well done. Michael

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/7/2012 11:53:00 AM

Fantastic, Jack. I guess I missed something. I was thinking we had to do three different poems but I am seeing many poets not doing that. Maybe he changed his rules. This is one of the best!! I am neglecting my little guest from Mexico, so I better get off soon and talk to her a bit!