White For Mourning

He saw the failed rescue attempt

Her whole body was white
As white as the dress she had discarded on the riverbank

He studied her still-beautiful still form
Thrilled and repelled
And cried for his bride

Kissing her fish cold lips
He crumpled the note she’d left

And watched them take her away with his dreams

For Anthony’s Whiteness contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 10/22/2012 9:26:00 PM
Oh so good..but I'd say [ice cold lips] the whole piece is so romantically maudlin..fish breaks the mood? Light & Love
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Date: 10/12/2012 9:47:00 AM
What a nightmare his dreams have become. "fish cold lips" gives me goose bumps. Very sad. love, Kathy
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Date: 10/10/2012 9:02:00 AM
WOW JACK I AM BREATHLESS READING THIS SAD STORY SO WELL DEFINED .. WINNING WISHES LUV AND CONGRATS ON YOUR MANY SPLENDID WINS TOO ..
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Date: 10/9/2012 12:30:00 PM
Oooo... splendid poetic description... Good luck in the contest... Terry
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Date: 10/9/2012 1:25:00 AM
Awesome one my dear friend! Al though I feel the sadness here, i love it!! Good luck always for a big win!!! love and hugs:) Leonora
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Date: 10/8/2012 2:14:00 PM
A sad poignant write Jack, with the flashes of word play that add to its theme ( best to you for that contest )
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Date: 10/8/2012 12:40:00 AM
rereading this again. I just love it. And you were fine doing only one poem as I just discovered rereading his rules today.
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Date: 10/7/2012 4:01:00 PM
Well, this one is a winner for sure in Anthony's contest...A little sad..It reminds me of a movie that I watched here lately called Mrs. Galloway..Thanks for stopping by..Your comments were so uplifting.Sara
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Date: 10/7/2012 2:38:00 PM
This is a chilling write my friend! I get the feeling of doom with this incredible poem! What a spectacular write for the contest! You've done excellent with this fearful write! Powerful piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 10/7/2012 12:58:00 PM
Masterpiece Jack!! Well done. Michael
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Date: 10/7/2012 11:53:00 AM
Fantastic, Jack. I guess I missed something. I was thinking we had to do three different poems but I am seeing many poets not doing that. Maybe he changed his rules. This is one of the best!! I am neglecting my little guest from Mexico, so I better get off soon and talk to her a bit!
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