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When Day Is Done

Day wanes and sun, once bold and high in summer’s sky, is melting into a shimmering pool of cool blue. Kaleidoscope colors, neon orange, brilliant mauve, deep rose, and softer hues of violet and pink blush weave in and out of trails of feathered clouds that slowly, ever slowly descend in the splendid sky. Reclined inside my giant inner tube, I gaze upward, at ease with myself, content in the world surrounding me and placid as the tranquil sea lapping against my dangling feet. My face tingles from the sun’s long kiss that has lingered on my skin since late afternoon. I look down at the beads of water gleaming on my chest. I lay my head as far back as I can, taking in the last rays of my lover sun, letting their warmth caress my cheeks. I close my eyes. . . then open them to a sky grown slightly dark. Shadows lengthen across the gentle waves. I shiver, peer down at my arms and see goose flesh has appeared. The water now pulses a rhythmic lullaby against my inner tube. I want to stay here, rocking and rocking as the shadows merge into one and become the opposite of what I’d come here for. But I am cold. Too much stillness is upon me. My day of sunny solitude diminished and then finally disappeared, leaving only the solitude. My day is done. I head for home.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 8/10/2014 5:18:00 PM
kinda reminds me of this one! Great indeed. But you edit differently these days. Love it though:) The Shadows one iS a great free verse.
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Date: 5/12/2013 7:06:00 AM
Andrea, thanks for you recent visit. I appreciate it. This is a lovely write! I could see you in my mind's eye enjoying and savoring the moments of your day turned dusk. :)
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Date: 5/8/2013 9:21:00 PM
Andrea, a nice little free verse poem :-) congratulations~ LINDA
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Date: 5/8/2013 7:34:00 PM
great write and win Andrea...congrats
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Date: 4/15/2011 12:28:00 AM
Lovely journey, Andrea. bfn. Lainie
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Date: 3/15/2010 8:38:00 PM
From now on I am gonna try them contest. Maybe I will win one one day. Until my day is done. I have alot of work 2 do .I have not had time 2 send u that poem I want u 2 go over. I feel like your poem...Usually in all my poems I just write imagination, or made up situation. I like 2 close my eyes pretend I am in this situation.
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Date: 3/8/2010 12:00:00 PM
Andrea, many congratulations on your win in Laura's fine contest >> and thank you so much for your ever kind words on my poems >> James
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Date: 3/8/2010 10:37:00 AM
Hi, Andrea. Congratulations on your well-deserved win in Laura's contest, Beyond Nightfall. I apologize for the error...the message was meant for you. Thanks for your kind comments on my poetry. Have a great day, and keep on writing. I wish you continued succes in your writing endeavors. Have a wonderful day. Love and hugs, Andrew.
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Date: 3/8/2010 9:51:00 AM
Congratulations, Carolyn on your win in Laura's contest, Beyond Nightfall. I love the imagery, the beauty and calmness of the sea, and the warm feeling of the poem. This a very lovely poem wonderfully written. God bless and keep on writing your amazing poetry. Love and hugs, Andrew..
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Date: 3/8/2010 9:27:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Laura's Beyond Nightfall! contest Andrea. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/8/2010 7:48:00 AM
Ahh...I remember thinking this would be a winner when I first read it!! Great work, Andrea....loved it then, and love it now! Congratulations on this beauty, and for your win!!! :) Love, Carrie
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Date: 3/8/2010 2:14:00 AM
A very nice poem to express your thoughts here, Andrea. Congratulations on your winning this contest. (^_^) Noel.
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Date: 3/7/2010 9:32:00 PM
Very, very nice Andrea. Congratulations on your win with this nostalgic poem. Love, Joyce
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Date: 3/7/2010 8:48:00 PM
Congrats on your HM Andrea in the Beyond Nightfall contest.. enjoy your sweet victory.. we will talk later..luv.. Linda-Marie..
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Date: 3/7/2010 7:55:00 PM
I love this..glad you were recognized for your fine work. BG
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Date: 3/7/2010 7:06:00 PM
Congratulations Andrea, for your Honorable Mention in the Poetry Soup member contest: Beyond Nightfall! I can see why you did so well! Nice work.! Smiles, Dane Ann
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Date: 2/28/2010 2:30:00 PM
I have always found that great poems inspire not just emotion, but thought, and your poem does both. It's definitely a poem I'm going to be rereading for some time.
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Date: 2/27/2010 11:15:00 AM
LOL why don't you make it hard for me to find woman..it's not called Nightfall (poke) Okies..loverly, excellent (of course) discriptive write. You've taken sentences and paragraphes and broken them down on the page to present as Free Verse. Each image is exactly that an nothing else. Free Verse in my mind portrays not only the outer layer of the onion but many layers down. The reader may or may not get all the layers the poet has intended. Love's Ya
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Date: 2/23/2010 12:17:00 AM
Another beautiful write, thank you so much for your kind words, you might like to see my poem Sun Set, love Simone
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Date: 2/22/2010 12:46:00 PM
Ahhh....a day in the water, watching the chill set in as the sun goes down! What a great description of such a lovely day ending! Great work, Andrea...this should do so well in the contest! ~ Luv Carrie
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Date: 2/22/2010 9:15:00 AM
What a write! This just takes the reader from day to night in the most exceptional way--very much like a moving painting :) I really enjoyed this Andrea, your description is spot on, can't help but feel like I myself am experiencing that transition from day to night--I'm sure this will be in the winner's list--it has to be!
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Date: 2/21/2010 11:33:00 PM
Wow. This is like a video. Your description is uncanny. Fun to read. David
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Date: 2/21/2010 9:25:00 PM
The first verse is simply put... beautiful or colorful. You have a promising talent. Thanks for your comments too :)
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Date: 2/21/2010 1:44:00 AM
Wonderful picture of all the colours of the evening melding together as darkness falls. sounds like the writer had a very relaxing day. :) gorgeous work... thanking you for your kind remarks...Love Margaret
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Date: 2/20/2010 7:11:00 PM
Amazing imagery and at the moment blending with the current playlist song something by Seal, I commend you on this masterful composition dear, I am a water child (Manchild) I love the waters and the setting and rising of the sun does inexplicable things to my soul, Bless you Andrea and thank you again for your kind words =)
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