What?

WHAT? (Rictameter – for Andrea Dietrich) I’m lost! Look all around There’s nothing familiar Except those distant tall buildings Oh but they must be miles and miles away Can’t remember how I got here This must be a nightmare But if it’s not? I’m lost!

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/26/2010 5:08:00 AM

Great write...I feel that way inside these large buildings ...I get confused...Keep the creative pen flowing...Sara

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 4/18/2010 6:00:00 PM

Much enjoyed,,indeed...Charma

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 4/18/2010 1:14:00 PM

senior moment--I have a few creeping up on me.

Kim M

Date: 4/18/2010 8:15:00 AM

Clever! ...and isn't it amazing how, in this rictameter, you created a visual of the sky scrapers of the distant city line?

Skat A

Date: 4/17/2010 7:58:00 PM

I can't believe the tittle got me again, enjoyed the second time more.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/17/2010 2:41:00 PM

goodness I do hate those lost dreams...but YOu knew where you were just not how you got there ...a Why am I? dream....Light & Love

Royal Trevino

Date: 4/16/2010 6:33:00 PM

You'll find your way:)... good write

Skat A

Date: 4/16/2010 5:33:00 PM

Hello, Daver I can comment all I can think of . But Andrea just made me lose head. It looks like fun on what ever dreams you to are writing. Irma ..I liked it by the way.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/16/2010 2:29:00 PM

And now you gotta do one about me running around lost in a stupid campus building!! I'll try to think of some other dreams of mine to inspire you more. thanks for feeling inspired by my Lost dream! You are the greatest, Luv, Andrea

Date: 4/16/2010 1:30:00 PM

I think we all feel this way at times. Nice dedication to Andrea. I see you've been exploring various forms. I've enjoyed reading the results. Keep on writing. Thank you for your kind comment. Karen

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/16/2010 11:00:00 AM

I am so pleased to have been able to read your poetry this morning Daver. Have a wonderful day. Love, Carol

Corinne Curcio

Date: 4/16/2010 9:56:00 AM

I work amongst the tall buildings! First in NYC and now in New Joisey! I'm doing okay Daver. Adjusting to a new office in a new State this week. How are YOU doing, my friend? :-)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/16/2010 6:37:00 AM

This fits good on the one who has just lost his head. I am sure you are confused . May be you are asleep. How ever you end up. I am sure you are all right . Nice read this morning.