Uninvited Loss

You were out shoveling snow 
Exhausted you lay down for a rest
Heart was exerted too much
You had no idea that the end was near

You were healthy and robust
Never heeded heard warnings
I hope you felt no pain 
As you drew your last breath

News of your death came
Massive heart attack in your sleep
Denial and shock registered first
Anguish and sorrow followed

Unbearable pain, heart shattered
Scalding tears, immense grief
Unwelcome change, life altered forever
A daughter left without her dad
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 9/15/2013 10:35:00 AM
Deep poem, Cecilia, the description of a lost one is described excellently. Enjoyable poem overall. Check out some of mine, might find some you like. Peace.
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Date: 6/26/2013 4:37:00 PM
Hi Cecilia, this is a deep poem... Linda
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Date: 4/4/2013 7:58:00 AM
Very moving and a cautionary tale for those of us that don't visit our doctors.
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Date: 3/13/2013 8:24:00 AM
Loss of a father is indeed a very sad part of lfe. It has been for me. Very touching. Jack
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Date: 11/22/2012 8:31:00 AM
CAme back to this sad one of yours but to wish you happy Thanksgiving. Sorry I can't be here as much as I'd like. Are you as busy as I am right now?
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Date: 11/21/2012 9:15:00 AM
Oh,very heartfelt write there Cecilia..That uninvited loss can be so very painful. :o( Very nice write...
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Date: 11/8/2012 9:36:00 AM
Loss is such a bitter pill. So, many of my friends and family are passing on these days. I keep thinking that I should retire while I'm still breathing. Your thought provoking poem gives me more motivation to retire. Excellent!
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Date: 11/7/2012 12:08:00 PM
The stress of life can sometimes be TOO much, thanks so much for your kind comments. Light & Love
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Date: 11/6/2012 2:45:00 PM
wow, you told this with amazing descriptiveness. We can feel your loss. It's such a shock to lose a loved one unexpectedly. that happened with my 33 year old brother. Luv, andrea
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Cecilia Macfarlane
Date: 11/6/2012 3:01:00 PM
Thanks Andrea....so sorry to hear about your brother and your loss, he was so young. Big hug to you. Luv, Cecilia
Date: 11/5/2012 2:14:00 PM
Touching - and close to home - only, I was the one shovelling. Lucky for me I called the Dr and two stents later moved to where it doesn't snow.
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Cecilia Macfarlane
Date: 11/6/2012 3:03:00 PM
So glad you are with us today to share your wonderful gift of writing Joe. Hugs
Date: 11/5/2012 11:01:00 AM
It's very, very hard work --- dangerous for heart --- sad but,well written Cecilia. --- Have a nice new week - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Cecilia Macfarlane
Date: 11/6/2012 3:08:00 PM
Thanks Anne Lise....hope you week is wonderful! Cecilia xo
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