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Undercurrent

I could never communicate to you my pain; it was always hit or miss. Maybe you sensed where my burden lay, but far more likely, You felt this pain at some point in your past.............or future, and are only recalling your own experience, your own burden. Yet it was so obvious I was hurting; that much you could tell. So a gentle smile was all you offered, no words, no hidden meanings. Just love and compassion, now and forever..............hurt is universal. I never wanted you to understand what I never understood. What if time collapsed this paradox? Our story has been written What if love saw through these walls? The characters have been set. Two opposing undercurrents flow just beneath the surface: Love unites, fear divides. Pain revives the deepest of my heart's confessions; It was from your love I chose to hide.

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Lucinda Bulger

Date: 8/14/2009 1:02:00 PM

"the paradox of pain is never ending Yoni. Just as every drop of water never leaves the Earth, it precipitates, evaporates forever; in my beliefs, every thought, the same way, they are perceived also to others and pretty much recycle for the most part forever, so as is this pain, I know it well, exceptional write my friend. Please check soup mail. bye bye, Lucinda

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 8/12/2009 1:52:00 PM

With so much risk for pain, I too have "hidden" from love at times, Yoni. Yet, I must say finding true love is the happiest feeling I have ever experienced. The correllation you describe is clear and well-founded. We struggle to stay grounded; love takes us to a more vulnerable state. Brilliant writing. And I did find a link about pterodactyl sitings that I will post on the poem. In fact, I will email the link to you! Thanks for the suggestion. Love you, Carolyn

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/12/2009 10:28:00 AM

As you said in soup mail it's way more complicated BUT sooooooooo much richer. I loved the formate too, very unique. One last question (and I'm not sure of the answer ;) did you want "chose" or "chosen" (don't bop me LOL. Light & Love

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 8/11/2009 10:30:00 PM

recomment-thanks for your comments always Yoni-re my last poem,no children dying at 4yrs,left at four is about the fourth left finger in a little bit of abstract--the marriage finger and the poem is about people who take a false step marrying the wrong person--thanks my good friend--hope im clearer now:)charma

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/11/2009 2:25:00 PM

It's a thought Yoni. Don't folks ever share pain? I think some do, those who love you share your pain. Light & Love

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/10/2009 7:44:00 AM

What a wonderful way to start a new week reading your new poetry Yoni.Thank you for sharing it. Love, Carol

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 8/10/2009 6:47:00 AM

This have to go to my favs Yoni cos i feel this deep write touching my very core,"What if love saw through these walls"? two undercurrents below the surface,sharing love without pain-that is a beautiful world you create here for two people which hug the same past looking for the same future,future without pain--bravo Yoni---charma