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under the cloud

I watched it falling
The shower from the sky
Aided by the breeze

I saw it coming
A python from the forest
Weed shook when she swayed

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  1. Date: 6/7/2013 9:28:00 AM
    Simple and yet powerful piece! - Edward

  1. Date: 6/4/2013 11:35:00 AM
    AO simple, exquisite I love it Shadow

  1. Date: 6/1/2013 8:59:00 PM
    Nice haiku.

  1. Date: 5/30/2013 8:15:00 PM
    ha, I'm staying out of this imagery. LOL - AO ....... ain't no way i can enjoy the imagery of a python swaying around. a great creepy haiku. I love it! ~SKAT~

  1. Date: 5/30/2013 4:04:00 PM
    wonderful haiku AO.....I heard one of the most feared snakes is the mamba....

  1. Date: 5/30/2013 10:06:00 AM
    hi! thank you for visiting my page, really appreciate it. well...I like how you stared and observed the things falling from the sky and moved ur attention to the other side... u showed how really observant u r.---keep smiling, Elai

  1. Date: 5/30/2013 9:21:00 AM
    I loved the first one and got scared by the second one! ;) Worded so well! AO...thanks for your visits to my work. Just to let you know...I did write a Limerick about PD for your contest, but then found out that I can't enter it! :( Note to self...READ RULES BEFORE WRITING! Take care!

  1. Date: 5/30/2013 8:31:00 AM
    Beautiful, strong lines.

  1. Date: 5/30/2013 6:39:00 AM
    Interesting work..Not sure if you are refering to a real alive python..If so, it must have been a very large specimen..Enjoyed reading this morn..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

    Oyewole Avatar Abdulhafeez Oyewole
    Date: 5/30/2013 9:09:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Yes I am referring to a live python. But not That big as you (may) imagine. Thanks for the visit Sara.
  1. Date: 5/30/2013 12:54:00 AM
    Very nice haiku enjoyed a lot. Wonderful picture. Thanks for wishing me congrats on my win. Loved always, my friend, bl

  1. Date: 5/29/2013 9:40:00 PM
    I really enjoyed the picture you created here.

  1. Date: 5/29/2013 9:14:00 PM
    my favorite type of haiku, makes sense and doesn't stop short :) i love it.