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Typewriter Such felicity to tip toe On thin ridge Delivering a premise Such strain in the chest To pour over a love-chest Heart sluggish or fast or missing A beat , the ancient treadmill A woodpecker bores Deep into a collage An origami of conversations Which way you look The only way back in the day, Of senescence, Metamorphosed since For a racy glide painless For plain or phantom rides. 23 Apr 2013 Form: Freeverse. For Nathan's contest.

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Date: 5/21/2013 2:35:00 PM
congrats jaggy, 4th is a great place to be (I say that bc I placed 4th in the last two contests lol) :)
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Date: 5/20/2013 9:19:00 PM
Jag, Congratulations.... enjoyed stopping by tonight ~LINDA
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Date: 5/20/2013 4:18:00 PM
Jag, these verses seem almost like a series of haikus, wonderful, unexpected juxtpositions of words, which somehow make sense anyway. Fine job!
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Date: 5/2/2013 9:52:00 PM
A very fine poem Jag, good luck in the contest...LINDA
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Date: 4/30/2013 10:50:00 AM
Wow Jag this is amazing poetry...
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Date: 4/28/2013 2:50:00 PM
i love it so much. beautiful imagery and descriptions
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Date: 4/28/2013 9:02:00 AM
Good piece... Best wishes~A.O
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Date: 4/27/2013 2:22:00 AM
Nice one!
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Date: 4/26/2013 4:57:00 PM
I agree with the comment below, it is an amazing poem, I think I get most of the metaphors, but your images and metaphors are sooo deep and profound, even for me...love the line "an origami of conversations" btw! x :) c
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Date: 4/26/2013 11:23:00 AM
wow.... this fine write is so distinct in substance and flow, dear jag...i'm simply amazed!... :) huggs!
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Date: 4/25/2013 2:08:00 AM
Jag, the thought is deep and well done in this poem! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/24/2013 7:04:00 PM
Well said Jag.....I started out on one of these...
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