Twisted

Twisted words with hidden meanings
Not lies, but still deceiving.
I lie in bed I’m dreaming
Those eyes are all I'm seeing.
You tried to be misleading
I died inside still bleeding.
My mind is fried I’m reeling,
I tried I was mistreated.
Once thrived I’m now depleted
But I’ve never retreated.
I’m seated I’m not defeated,
I’ll beat it and be undefeated…

lost lovelovefree verse

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John Freeman

Date: 11/18/2009 5:32:00 PM

congratulations on your poem being featured this week, Sincerely, Moses

Janette Fisher

Date: 11/18/2009 10:43:00 AM

Congatulations on your poem being feaured this week. Rgds Janette

Iolanda Scripca

Date: 11/16/2009 8:59:00 PM

Congratulations for being featured this week. Love, Iolanda

James Fraser

Date: 11/16/2009 10:29:00 AM

Many congratulations on your poem being featured this week >> James

P Sheart

Date: 11/16/2009 9:52:00 AM

Congrats on your feature poem this week! Love Light Patty

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 11/16/2009 5:14:00 AM

Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Saq. I wish you the best in your writing endeavors. Love, Carol

Date: 11/15/2009 7:15:00 PM

Interesting perspective for a thought provoking poem. Nice use of rhyme. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Wishing you ongoing success with your writing. Karen

Sag Capone

Date: 8/28/2009 10:39:00 PM

Thank you for your incite Deborah, I've fixed the grammatical errors. As far as the name goes, it is not invisible as if I don't exist in the world. It is invisible as in, noone knows that I'm here writing. The poetry is invisible, not the poet :) When I first posted it was posting in my real name.. I didn't want that, as I wish for people I know to not see these things. Thanks for your words... possibly I will change it soon.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/28/2009 5:14:00 PM

I lie...lye is a burning chemical...I died inside...your name..it's a harsh hard thing to call oneself...and self defeating..pick a positive name for you! Light & Love

Derrick Burton

Date: 8/11/2009 11:25:00 PM

loved the beginning, it hooked me from the start. Also loved the inner rym you gave as well. Enjoy your night. :)