Trust

In you i fear most never ending one way street one’s mentality broken and in love destroyed who’s ever been there for me? Love a dual carriage way never straight mixed emotions yet for me so blind everything to you given trust, no more i can’t. here i'm experimenting with a different form of poetry, yet using the Tanka.. calling it the 4 T's (toe to toe tanka. see the syllable count and you will get it''' 5/7/5/7/7/7/7/5/7/5 © Harry J Horsman 2013

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/24/2013 6:58:00 AM

Hi Andrea I tried one in Harry's style and called it toe to toe. I enjoyed trying it out. Also Good morning to you Harry. I hope you have a great day.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/28/2013 8:36:00 PM

hmmm, not sure I get why it's called Toe to toe Tanka. Did you invent it all yourself, Harry? What a fun thing to do.It seems I saw this the other day but it must have been used as an example by someone for this form because I have no comment here from the other day. How cool that you inspired the poets I see here to try your new form!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/28/2013 8:33:00 PM

harry I changed my first haiku out for another one here at Soup already. I have some pretty bad ones in haiku category!! now to examine your poem here.

Terry O'Leary

Date: 4/28/2013 3:37:00 PM

Interesting form, Harry... great poem! Terry

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/28/2013 1:42:00 PM

Hi Harry, I gave your style a try.

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 4/28/2013 12:53:00 PM

you do this so well but it is so sad harry xx

Bl Devnath

Date: 4/28/2013 12:28:00 PM

It's really different and excellent too. One way to two ways.....Thanks.........., loved always, bl

Donna Jones

Date: 4/28/2013 6:59:00 AM

I feel you took these thoughts right out of my mind..scary..how you were able to get such feelings..in black and white...but you did it beautifully..

Eileen Manassian

Date: 4/28/2013 6:48:00 AM

You are the tanka master and now a new form! Wow, Harry, how do you do it! I will try this sometime soon. I did write a weird kind of tanka, and I hope you have a look at it when you can. This is a very deep write you've penned here. Unfortunately, once trust is broke...restoring it is near night impossible. Hugs