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they said when they found her she was frozen my god-mother who was a police officer told me they had to peel the ice laden sheets from my mothers face i knocked on the the door the night before when it swung open behind the iron guard gate i stared at champagne such an odd name for a pit bull having hated me for years he lunged at the gate why didn't i just leave? why? i ran to the back of the house and broke the window why was i panicking? broke the window to draw him to the back ran back to the front door and tried... mamma i tried.... to open the gate champagne such an odd name hit the gate howling and growling i wish i would have paid attention to how he looked at me i left defeated and asked the neighbor if he had seen my mom "not today" i found out the next day that my mom was frozen stiff on that bed all alone while i knocked outside

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 9/10/2010 1:40:00 PM
I cried when I read this. Im so sorry that you had to endure this with your own mum. Sending you a huge hug.... Robyn
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Date: 6/3/2009 10:12:00 PM
heartfelt and sad,this poem broke my heart,to loose mum is to loose the world,and not to be near her at that moment of departing is wound cut deep---strong emotions,kept me reading it over again,it goes to my favs and you to my favs poets-charma
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Date: 5/22/2009 5:53:00 AM
Brian this just gave me chills all over. Such power and emotion, through your material here, makes me want to run over and give you a big hug! That would be so awful to not know what was going on and then what a dark day the next? Again I am left here with tears streaming down my face this morning.
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Date: 5/22/2009 4:20:00 AM
you walking away not knowing...powerful lines and powerful way of telling a story....I am adding this in my faves and putting you as my fave poet..your work always do wonders to my writing..calling me higher..keep up the good work.
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Date: 5/22/2009 4:17:00 AM
Oh goodness Brian....this really knocked me out this morning...the content is just mind blowing..I know this type of death.. I know what it is like to lose a parent....knowing that you will never see them again until that time..this is working on my heart.....from a poetry stand point it is awesome..I love the champagne line and you writing the odd name line over and over..something about that line and you repeating it that made this poem breaks me down..the knock..the neighbor...
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Date: 5/22/2009 1:44:00 AM
A powerful write full of emotion, it is devestating when we are not able to help those we love. God bless you from diane
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Date: 5/22/2009 12:43:00 AM
So much underlying emotion here Brian.Rgds Brian
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