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Troubled Mind Rages

as the moon rises mimicking the high-noon sun the air thickens steel-force and cuts through life in bits and pieces like light through fog. screams echo down lonely town streets as cement makeshift sky reflects the sun hours before its own rise and wishes of help blow cold on a windless night; a gasp of breath rises and dissipates like steam from nearby asphalt as eyes close one last time. (this was about a murder, in the town I live, where these things don't happen... the man murdered his step daughter before dawn people heard her screams and couldn't see his knife but by time they got there it was too late, and he then turned the knife on his wife as she tried to flee in the car)

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Date: 10/2/2013 6:52:00 PM
Thank you for the footnote as it makes the poem even more chilling. The scene you painted carries the theme well. Disturbing actions from depraved minds.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/2/2013 7:08:00 PM
Thank you Karen for your kind words, where have you been lately? hope all is good :)
Date: 10/2/2013 5:22:00 PM
wow, jack is right, This sure is a chilling one. i am not sure I would have realized there was a murder committed without seeing your footnote but the mood of sadness was really strong. I love the line about cement sky before sun's rise. YOu have sure been busy with good poems lately. Sorry I can't take more time to see the others. I'm getting behind here. Did I answer your last email. Can't remember!!!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/2/2013 7:06:00 PM
it's all good Andrea...I know you are busy, I too wish I had more soup time, it seems time flies by a bit quick for my likings.. thank you for your kind comment :) I can't drive by that part of town without thinking about it, and I used to talk with that man often at a store I worked at in the evening ...scary!
Date: 10/2/2013 4:39:00 PM
This was chilling, even before I read the explanation. Very intense... Jack
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/2/2013 7:07:00 PM
thank you Jack, your kind comments are appreciated :)

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