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Her Chilled Splendor

her chilled beauty...

   splashed in whitened paint

          through Christmas' buds

             my eyes turn into soot

and bury Mom's splendor



Not So Happy Holidays Contest

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Juliet Ligon Date: 12/14/2013 8:28:00 PM So sad. I love the format you used. Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 12/12/2013 3:45:00 PM a gorgeous and sad tanka, nette. Congrats for your win. Login to Reply

Monterey Sirak Date: 12/12/2013 8:23:00 AM Congrats on your win. This is sad, touching and powerful. There is always something beyond grief, light, love, and flowers rising from the ashes. Login to Reply

Donna Jones Date: 12/12/2013 7:22:00 AM This gem is a sad lovely winner. Congratulations nette Login to Reply

Tim Ryerson Date: 12/12/2013 6:18:00 AM Oh mercy me Nette, I am SO sorry...I can surely identify...Grief turned into beauty...That's what it's all about is it not? Honored to share a spot with you my dear friend - Tim Login to Reply Tim Ryerson Date: 12/12/2013 9:16:00 AM I also see we have survived this contest unscathed if you know what I mean...

Kelly Deschler Date: 12/3/2013 5:58:00 PM A very moving and heartfelt Christmas poem, Nette. Sometimes, the holiday season brings more tears than smiles. Especially, when our loved ones cannot be with us. Beautiful work! I wish you the best of luck in the contest!...Thank you so much for the wonderful congrats on my poem! Login to Reply

Painted Hunter Date: 12/3/2013 9:51:00 AM Mercy...that one packs a punch. It's wonderful....and sad Login to Reply

Jack Ellison Date: 12/2/2013 5:25:00 PM Christmas can be the happiest of time and the saddest of times! A wonderful passionate write, my dear Nette! xox Login to Reply

Poet Tacito Date: 12/2/2013 9:17:00 AM Sigh...the power & downfall of family and its realities. This hit so hard. Tremendous writing. Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/2/2013 9:05:00 AM Short and emotionally significant. Login to Reply

Russell Sivey Date: 12/2/2013 8:10:00 AM Oh wow, Nette, this is a very sad write my friend! But this is a tremendously well written poem! You have impressed me again with your incredible skill, you can make me feel exactly what you were trying to portray with the greatest of ease! I really loved reading this awesome poem this morning! What a grandiose piece, Great Work!! Login to Reply

Liam Mcdaid Date: 12/2/2013 7:56:00 AM beautifully drawn piece Login to Reply

Arthur Vaso Date: 12/1/2013 9:07:00 PM This is a masterpiece, loved it. Login to Reply

Ken Carroll Date: 12/1/2013 8:00:00 PM Hi Nette, A poignant and sensitive write..Thanks for your kind comments on my verse.. Ken Login to Reply

Donna Jones Date: 12/1/2013 6:37:00 PM Nette :( oh so sad....such wonderful writing but I'm hoping its not true..... Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 12/1/2013 5:26:00 PM I feel the pain..I hope just a work and not a life happening..I was delighted that you dropped by...Sara Login to Reply

Charmaine Chircop Date: 12/1/2013 4:22:00 PM This transmits a very sad emotive feeling.Its an amazing post..Hopefully fictional .I missed you and my friends but I m busy dear one. Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 12/1/2013 4:08:00 PM ..... mournful poem, Nette. - Well done - Good luck in the contest! - Have a nice December week. - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply

Leon Datu Date: 12/1/2013 3:57:00 PM The way the poem builds its sense of loss with each line is so moving. The pivot in the end shocks me. You are really gifted, Nette.Likewise honored to be among those who got a place in your contest. Thank you! Login to Reply