To You

To You To you my love I want to say, that I'm leaving your life today, with hope of forgetting you, because to me - you nwere never true. It made me sad when I found out. I cried for days and many nights. I went outside and cried somemore, then someone passed by and asked me - what was wrong? With tears in my eyes and pain in my heart, I could not answer. He nod his head and and walked away and said that he would be back the next day. The next day he came back and left me two verses. and I started to sing. The first one said - I am now leaving, the world is yours, you are now free so let it be. The second one said - your sweet words were nothing, but sweet lies. What you promise me was never true - that's the reason, I'm leaving you...
03/08/2013 Writt6en by Lucilla M. Carrillo
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 3/10/2013 1:21:00 PM
Well... You did the right thing by leaving (just my opinion.). I like the circular nature of the piece, or maybe it's more like a "C" shape, not quite closed? Jack
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Date: 3/9/2013 10:49:00 AM
HE sounds like a cad to accuse you in his note of those very things he was guilty of!!! Sad one, and I enjoyed the read, Lucilla. Why don't YOU try the ABC poem contest? Poets here are doing some really fun ones.
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Date: 3/9/2013 5:12:00 AM
Very touching write. Sad also. Lovely piece of poetry. Tfs
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Date: 3/8/2013 5:31:00 PM
Awesome, Lucilla. This one left me all misty-eyed. Niiiiiiice. :)
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Date: 3/8/2013 4:31:00 PM
Very moving and sad. It is so hard to be betrayed by the one we love. Thanks for all the time you took to read and comment on my poems. Your kindness is appreciated.blessings to you as well.
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Date: 3/8/2013 1:52:00 PM
my daughter should send one of these to her x-love... a to you: 'poem... xox~PD
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Date: 3/8/2013 1:51:00 PM
wow Lucy, these are strong and sad emotions... Only you know why the song touched your soul.... sometimes strangers will pick up and say the right thing, ,, it is up to us to jump and listen to reason... and let go of what hurts us... a very good verse.. always~ LINDA
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Date: 3/8/2013 12:26:00 PM
This is an utterly beautiful and wondrous write my friend! Though a sad write, it is a tremendous poem, full of great emotion and grandeur! What a blessing this piece truly is Lucilla, true gorgeousness! Awesome Work!!
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Date: 3/8/2013 12:14:00 PM
Aweeeee... I enjoyed the read but it's just so sad !!! I too wish it is just a poem and not true. Blessings for happiness !!
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Date: 3/8/2013 12:08:00 PM
This is sad in its beauty! Hope it is just a poem inspired by something that isn't true to life. Thanks for sharing!
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Date: 3/8/2013 11:43:00 AM
Ohhhh .... Lucilla, it is sad ....... but beautifully written!! - Want that love will last forever ..... not goodbye.......- Have a beautifully weekend. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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