To One That I Love

Have I failed you my sweet child
I know the answer 
My tears of truth do not lie

The pain you've suffered
It lives in me

A marriage broken 
Left you a casualty

A mother's deepest wish
Is to make everything right

But nine years before
Woke new in me tonight

I can't make it better
So I cry in vain

There will always be days
When my tears come
 As a gentle rain
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009


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Date: 2/4/2010 8:22:00 AM
Dear Sis, this is written in the essence of a very Loving Mother " Tears come as a gentle rain " a beautiful moving sentiment Superb POETIC Talent put to Pen LOVE YOU ALWAYS ...HG
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Date: 1/12/2010 3:18:00 PM
Yes Laurie, I do relate to this poem, as only a single mom who raised her children mostly alone can. All we can do is encourage our children to rise above, and to be gentle with our self on those days when the tears com ...as a gentle rain. I know them well. Beautifully rendered ...thank you and congratulations.
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Date: 9/18/2009 6:20:00 PM
wanted to let you know that we still look for you and that you are not forgotten... looking forward to your return:-)
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Date: 9/17/2009 6:50:00 PM
While it may be true that we don't ever want to hurt our children, sometimes we do but even more important is that we remain true to ourselves and know that some day our children will understand. This is a beautiful write here, Laurie and since they changed the format here I have no idea how if it current or not ... oh well, glad you're here at the Soup!!
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Date: 9/10/2009 12:26:00 PM
Dear Laurie, Such depth of motherly LOVE Great job. Where are YOU Sis I miss YOU please come backAll my LOVE ALWAYS and FOREVER...HARRY
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Date: 8/22/2009 9:06:00 PM
Laurie I just wanted to thank you for commenting on my poetry and to let you know you are sorely missed. Hope all is well and hope to see you posting once again. God Bless. Ron
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Date: 8/16/2009 5:28:00 AM
Beautiful, Laurie. I've been off the soup for awhile due to eye problems...am just getting around to my mail. What do you mean by "tagged?"
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Date: 7/11/2009 4:13:00 AM
Laurie every mum gives their child the best they can that is not money gold or flashy present,jus their love,mums arent perfect laurie but the intention for thier child always is,situations happen to all children ,mums everyone,yet no one takes the fault for happenings-hope you are feeling better sweet Laurie too--love charma
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Date: 7/9/2009 7:44:00 PM
Laurie I just had to comment again on this. My youngest daughter is facing the same problem and it tears me up seeing her hurting so. God Bless dear friend. Ron
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Date: 7/9/2009 5:35:00 PM
My Dearest Sister, You put tears in my eyes, a Heartfelt piece of YOUR life I read that 52% of all Marriages in America end in divorce and we ask why are there so many dysfunctional childen It is a subject i do not understand YOU portray it (sadly) so well I LOVE YOU ALWAYS. ..HG
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Date: 7/9/2009 11:04:00 AM
such a heartfelt poem. thanks for pouring your heart and soul out for us. written with much love................
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Date: 7/9/2009 5:00:00 AM
reads even more gripping the second-time, Laurie.... that last stanza is unreal good....and thanks for great story in your comment, jimbo
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Date: 7/1/2009 5:03:00 PM
I hope you won't continue to blame yourself, Laurie. You can offer emotional support if your child will accept it. Children can suffer more when they're in a home where their parents are unhappy. God bless you for sharing this heartfelt write. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 7/1/2009 2:16:00 PM
very sweet compassion of a devoted Mother, just gently beautiful, Laurie, jim
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Date: 7/1/2009 11:05:00 AM
Hey my friend..just found this heartfelt poem, and oh my goodness, you speak for parents all over this land...you my dear, put too much weight upon your own shoulders...this poem speaks so heavily of the responsibility you feel. But know that parents aren't meant to be perfect....we do the best we can with what we know and what we have. Take heart in the love you have for your boys. xoxox
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Date: 7/1/2009 8:13:00 AM
The emotion comes through your words in this one. Parents always want the best for their children and grieve for the pain in their lives. This is a heartfelt piece, one that parents will surely relate to. Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Keep on writing. Karen
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Date: 7/1/2009 6:56:00 AM
hey my dear friend,at last you re back writing--always in my prayers--heartfelt and sad poems like if the writer passed through so many emtions lately-my friend im sure you will everything ewrite for your child,mums are always perfect in their children's eyes--good you re writing means we re smiling--your friend--charma:)
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Date: 7/1/2009 6:45:00 AM
This is strong write that shows a heart that wants to be mend..love the purity and honesty of this piece.
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Date: 7/1/2009 5:41:00 AM
Tears are never in vain, especially those shed for our children. Beautiful and heart rendering write. God Bless. Ron
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Date: 7/1/2009 2:58:00 AM
This is a great but sad poem with so much in it...the final lines are my favorite with the tears coming as a gentle rain...Luke
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Date: 7/1/2009 12:23:00 AM
Love the 'haiku' style in the last verse Laurie.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
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Date: 6/30/2009 11:26:00 PM
This is a soothing heartfelt One-->Just be there for her*Thumbs Up*
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