Tiny

A tiny dark chamber
With small pulsating mass
Blood regurgitating 
Scary place
A broken heart  

Gogyohka form

lifenaturetanka

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Bl Devnath

Date: 10/28/2012 10:57:00 AM

Wonderful poem of broken heart keeps alive. Nicely done. Loved always, bl

Kash Poet

Date: 10/28/2012 12:45:00 AM

great imagination from you in this Tanka Sara.Beautifully penned.Best wishes.

Anthony Nutter

Date: 10/27/2012 5:38:00 AM

Liked it, on the dark side for you. Nice Tanka

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 10/26/2012 9:11:00 PM

SOUNDS LIKE A PLACE TO BEWARE SARA .. SO ENJOYED THIS EERIE THRILLER LUV ..

Kathryn Collins

Date: 10/26/2012 8:33:00 AM

Dear Sara - Brings tears to my eyes this jammed packed piece of raw emotion. love, Kathy

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/25/2012 3:24:00 PM

wow, Sara, this is profound, if for the contest, wow, i know where this would place in mine

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/25/2012 2:39:00 PM

A great physical description as well, Sara!!

Vesna Kovrlija

Date: 10/25/2012 12:04:00 PM

I love this poem, too.

Virginia Mitchell

Date: 10/25/2012 10:13:00 AM

I love your poem, Sara! Your writing is splendid. I do think, though, the title doesn't do it justice. I don't feel it is strong enough.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/25/2012 9:54:00 AM

wonderful imagery, sara... emotions are chaotic but well defined.. on to the winners' list!..:) huggs

Russell Sivey

Date: 10/25/2012 8:00:00 AM

Wow, I see the subtle difference between your two 'Heart' poems, one a Tanka, the other a Gogyoka! I think I really enjoyed this one better as you weren't confined to a syllable count to keep you so restricted! This is a great and wondrous write, I really enjoyed reading it this morning! What a delightful piece, Awesome Work!!