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Time Paints a Picture

.            Man would it be a trip if my
               future self arrived today
                   to tell me how she 
                        found our 
                          Source 
                            of 
                           Life,
                        and that
                      I'm actually
                   there with her in
                 perfect unison now.
              Truly I'd be speechless.

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Date: 12/4/2009 8:14:00 AM

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/17/2009 7:20:00 AM

Nicley written thoughtful piece. Enjoy your work. On my poem about the man, I was not refering to any one in particular or all men but when men or women are separated from God. Thanks for your comments. Sara

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire

Date: 7/15/2009 8:28:00 PM

My Dear Yoni, Wow I have to say This is so so very perfect I find a different YOU compared to many of YOUR other POEMS Excellent Image and the message "Immortal" SUPERB write ALWAYS YOUR LIEGE...HG

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/7/2009 10:36:00 AM

great shaping verse! Hmmm I thought you were a man...peer (.) (.)....she? her? enlighten me please. No matter Light & Love

Date: 7/4/2009 6:39:00 AM

Right away this piece draws one's attention with it's visual impact. Though you're speechless you're still writing! I had to throw that in. Good job with this one. Thank you for sharing your talent with us and for your thoughts on my poem. Have a wonderful weekend! Karen

Matthew Anish

Date: 6/23/2009 7:38:00 PM

Nice description of a "Time Warp" Did you list this as science fiction? Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/23/2009 2:47:00 PM

Very interesting thoughts on the concept of "time," Yoni. I am intrigued by theories that all things, past and present, are really happening at the same time. If that were true, you surely would by with your "Source of Life" at all times. Amazing observation from a brilliant mind! Love you, Carolyn

Shannon O'Leary

Date: 6/22/2009 7:05:00 PM

I like this poem. It is creative and well written! Thanks for complimenting on my poem! When I wrote about the win or victory I was thinking that when people overcome struggles it feels like they have won. I hope that makes some sense. Thanks for the comment again! I appreciate it!