Thoughts

Tight grip on my sword
whispers shatter my mind
slash the dark in a straight line
find the dawn of my life
thoughts flutter around me
greedily eats my desire

agony of doubt consumed my dreams
ignorance deceived my sight
pale stars float in the emptiness
crooked wings of fairy tales

many times I've seen a dream 
tonight i give the world my sight
paper and ink will be my knight
hazy visions of the night
help me see the light
words carved in my heart
sky bleeding in my eyes

feather is my soul
ink is my path
paper is my life
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009


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Date: 9/28/2009 11:34:00 PM
Nesma, congratulations !...hope to see your name on the finals! Smart and well organized lines; the music of words is perfect..I can feel the 'strength of rebellion' of your poem ... i liked the 'hazy visions of light/help me see the light' it is a poem by itself. Lovely....Bassam
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Date: 9/26/2009 5:03:00 PM
Interesting reflection. I really like the last stanza. Congratulations on making it through the first round in the contest. Good luck in the finals! Karen
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Date: 9/24/2009 12:28:00 PM
Congratulations on your poem making it through the first round.Wishing you the best in the finals. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/23/2009 6:34:00 AM
thank you for sharing your thougts and congratulations on this feature of the week. lainie
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Date: 9/22/2009 7:56:00 PM
Nesma, congrats on your feature this week...Raul
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Date: 9/22/2009 6:39:00 AM
Congratulations on your wonderful poetry being featured this week Nesma >>James
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Date: 9/21/2009 4:37:00 PM
Very nicely done! Congratulations on your featured poem ! Laura :)
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Date: 9/21/2009 6:30:00 AM
wonderful use of imagery...hazy visions of the night help me see the light words carved in my heart sky bleeding in my eyes Congrats on your poetry being featured this week… please keep writing… great you! Adeleke
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Date: 9/21/2009 5:08:00 AM
Congrats Sis... I'm so proud of you.. keep writing... Love, Dima
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Date: 9/21/2009 3:14:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured this week Nesma. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/7/2009 4:23:00 PM
I love the creativeness in this wonderful write! Well done! Laura :)
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Date: 5/7/2009 12:26:00 PM
Fascinating description, words flow remarkably, and is meaningful.
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