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The Snooping Walls

The snooping walls are watching me And now they know my secret kink. I feel their eyes upon my back And wonder what the hell they think. I fear they’ll tell the world about The prostitute I sawed in half. I trust the doors and windows, though, As when I killed, I heard them laugh… For Susan’s If these walls could talk contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 9/21/2012 7:46:00 PM
Wow, Jack! An excellent and quite disturbing write. Don't worry your secrets safe...LOL! Congrats!! Hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 9/21/2012 4:20:00 AM
This was so good, but so bad! Loved it Jack. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 9/20/2012 12:00:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Jack. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/18/2012 3:20:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work..Sara
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Date: 9/18/2012 2:41:00 PM
Congrats on your write, well done. Sounds a bit like a broadway show, Todd Sweeney I think its called. Lee
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Date: 9/18/2012 12:03:00 PM
Congrats Jack on this great and sinister write! Hugs
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Date: 9/18/2012 9:57:00 AM
Congratulations on your imaginative poem winning. teriific job.
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Date: 9/18/2012 9:12:00 AM
"Wow Jack. I had no idea! Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 9/18/2012 7:54:00 AM
BIG CONGRATS JACK LUV ON A FABULOUS WRITE AND FIRST PLACE WIN .. ALWAYS A TREAT MY FRIEND ..
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Date: 9/18/2012 5:43:00 AM
super nice write Jack..i like it..congrats on your win!! (^_^)
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Date: 9/17/2012 9:05:00 PM
I just knew she would love this. Susan has a great dark humor herself. Big congrats. It was deliciously morbid.
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Date: 9/17/2012 7:40:00 PM
wow!! great write my friend! Congratulations on your big win!! hugs:) Leonora
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Date: 9/17/2012 6:05:00 PM
Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 9/17/2012 5:30:00 PM
I hope they talk on you Jack...lol. a funny one, but don't we wish walls could talk, so they perps could be caught more often and faster? great write and big congrats on a super win. One love. Joy Wells
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Date: 9/17/2012 3:20:00 PM
You wrote this as tho u were a serial killer, eh?...Great concept and u blew the roof off the top with it!! Just leave it to Jack to write something grand!! Congrats, gwendolen
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Date: 9/17/2012 12:06:00 PM
eerie yet beautifully crafted, jack.... sweet congrats and huggs!.:)
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Date: 9/17/2012 11:25:00 AM
A great poem here jack!Congrats on your win.
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Date: 9/17/2012 10:27:00 AM
Congratulation on your #1 win Jack! Loved the dark humor in this one :)
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Date: 9/17/2012 10:24:00 AM
Hola, Jack , congratulations with your wonderful win in Susan's "If These Walls Could Talk..." contest.. have a nice day~ PD
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Date: 9/17/2012 10:16:00 AM
congratulations on you win Jack a smashing write xx
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Date: 9/17/2012 9:37:00 AM
congrats on a supe win Jack luv .. most creative entry .. hope all is okay ..
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Date: 9/16/2012 3:15:00 AM
scarily crazy! love this thing
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Date: 9/8/2012 7:27:00 AM
wow, i was not prepared for the second verse! very cleverly done and beautifully rhymed.
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Date: 9/8/2012 6:51:00 AM
what a terrific idea to make this a murder mystery within the walls Jack luv .. a brilliant and outstanding entry .. winning wishes luv ..
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Date: 9/8/2012 1:39:00 AM
You always come up with something scary .........makes one wonder!!!! no just kidding love it .xx
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