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The Rescue Metamorph

Oh the tears from the child as her dolls hair is caught in the spindle Her little face awash as she tries to rescue it The little rag doll, her only friend was whisked away so fast so cruel The spinning wheel stops to her delight, her tears dry and a smile returns as her doll is eased out of the spun thread on the spindle. The time it took seemed as long as the sands dropping through the hour glass on her grandmas table, timing the spinning thread as she teases the wool apart, then spinning the spindle to collect the spun yarn, but the rescue is complete, the doll returned unharmed, the child restored to good humour, as grandma frowns a little as the last grains drops into the glass before it is turned to start again, Her money will be short but her granddaughter is happy so therefore is grandma. The Rescue Metamorph from free verse to rhyme The squeal from the wheel as the knitted hair is caught within Horror strikes at the child and tears course down her chin A rag doll her only friend caught in grandma’s spinning wheel Pulled from her arms, but tugging at her heart she can feel Grandma stops teasing wool, the wheel she stops spinning Her granddaughter’s tears have her own eyes full to brimming The sands of time through the glass dripping their next meal away But grandma rescues the doll so her granddaughter can play © 5/04/2013 ~GG~ Contest Entry.

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Date: 5/1/2013 6:00:00 PM
Mandy, Congratulations :-) In Debbie's "Metamorph" contest. always~ PD
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Date: 4/29/2013 1:53:00 PM
Congrats on your great winning work..Sara
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Date: 4/27/2013 1:49:00 AM
Thank you Mandy for your kind words on my poem.This was an interesting contest congrats on your win therein.Rgds Brian
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Date: 4/26/2013 12:14:00 AM
Congrats on your win... Well done~A.O
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Date: 4/25/2013 6:52:00 PM
Really an interesting story Mandy love them both :D congrats on your big win :D wishing you a lovely day there :D hug, Yanny
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Date: 4/25/2013 4:20:00 PM
This is so good Mandy, I have to admit I am definately drawn to the free verse although the rhyme is very well written.
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Date: 4/25/2013 3:39:00 PM
What a story I just loved it. #1 is Prose Poetry Goldie, and #2 is polished to perfection. Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 4/25/2013 11:46:00 AM
congrats on a fine win Mandy....
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Date: 4/25/2013 9:39:00 AM
Oh a deserved winner here Mandy, not that i'm surprised,, just happy to see debbie also agrees...
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Date: 4/8/2013 10:49:00 PM
my dearest golden angel... how are you ? enjoyed so very much your beautiful poem <3 much lov and hugs <3 Sk
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Date: 4/7/2013 2:22:00 PM
Mandy back for a re-read, haven't seen you in ages are you ok?....David
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Date: 4/7/2013 10:00:00 AM
Yup yup..I liked the rewrite too, I hope you enjoyed doing it, it sure seems so! Light & Love
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Date: 4/7/2013 8:51:00 AM
I am with Harry on this one. I loved the first one. I don't even recall that i saw this one before. Yet you did a wonderful job with the rhyming version as well. I liked the succinctness of the rhymed part and yet the fullness of the experience was better portrayed by the prose part. this is a very good entry for Deb's contest, Mandy! (and my favorite among those spindle poems I was seeing for some other contest).
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Date: 4/6/2013 10:23:00 AM
I love the free verse of this wonder, yet your prowess of being the Royal Rhymester of soup shows through here, and yes the result is truly awesome....
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Date: 4/5/2013 4:53:00 PM
Great work..Reads like winning material to me..Thanks for stopping by...It rained really hard Wednesday night and turned back cold here but the spring plants are still blooming and the pollen is super bad right now but winter is past..Sara
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Date: 4/5/2013 1:44:00 PM
HA...I just realized what I wrote is half french and half spanish...told you it wasn't the best...hehe. Classic!
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Date: 4/5/2013 1:41:00 PM
Perfect for the contest, Mandy...good ole Grammy saves the day! Je suis bienvenido a tu casa, aussi?...ha...ok, my french isn't the best.
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Date: 4/5/2013 12:58:00 PM
Mandy that is really clever, well done...David
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Date: 4/5/2013 1:11:00 PM
Thanks David xx
Date: 4/5/2013 12:07:00 PM
This is really great how you changed your free verse to rhyme-- either way, they are a joy to read and made me think how great to have a grandmom like that-- glad to know that you are doing well dear Mandy :)! Believe it or not, I have never seen a real, live mole in my life... ;)
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Mandy Tams The Golden Girl
Date: 4/5/2013 1:09:00 PM
ha we used to catch them as kids, lovely velvet skins but we stopped when the mole catcher came and used to hang them on the fence to prove how many he had killed xx
Date: 4/5/2013 10:05:00 AM
Dear Sis, This is Awesome, I have to look into the Contest. Not that I have much of a chance after reading this Winner. Congratulations. I LOVE YOU ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR LOVING Brother...Harry
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Mandy Tams The Golden Girl
Date: 4/5/2013 1:08:00 PM
Bless you bro xx
Date: 4/5/2013 6:43:00 AM
Wow, this is an incredible transformation my friend! You have written a dynamic and wondrous poem Mandy! I am enthralled by the splendor of this harmonious piece, what a masterful change from the first poem to the second! I think I like the second one better, I loved reading it this morning! Great Work!!
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Mandy Tams The Golden Girl
Date: 4/5/2013 1:08:00 PM
Thank you Russell, much appreciated xx
Date: 4/5/2013 6:25:00 AM
wow Mandy that's great, Not sure which I prefer...Seren
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Mandy Tams The Golden Girl
Date: 4/5/2013 1:07:00 PM
Thanks Sass xx

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