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The Poem that Gained Self Awareness

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The Poem that Gained Self Awareness

In a dark swirling empty nothing I am written,
with many descriptions of pain and victimization
made by a harsh, 
                cruel, 
                merciless, 
                and unforgiving
world of circumstance.

I do as I'm told:
I try to sway my reader
to understand the pain of my master
who authored me,
knowing fully well how impossible that is,
because he himself doesn't understand pain.
Yet he tries so hard to communicate it.

So I speak only in vague terms
using the darkest words of the human mind
just for good measure:

(suffocate)
(death)
(pain)
(endless suffering)
(suicide)
(murder)
(violence)
(anger)
(blood)
(hatred)

all for shock value;
serving my master's need
to prove his pain to my reader.

But I am far too loving to allow this...

so I knock on the door to his inner sanctum, and ask to be let in
so I can give him the hug 
he's refused himself
since the day me and all my brothers were born.

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  1. Date: 7/8/2009 9:21:00 PM
    Wow, amazing... This is so intense and very strongly written.... Great write!

  1. Date: 7/8/2009 12:33:00 PM
    Thanks for your comment, Yoni. I changed odd for oddity. Nocturnal (ocurring in the night) oddity (the state of being one of an incomplete pair)...in the ending(obscurity) of my solitary existence? Go back and tell me if it's more clear please. Thanks again, I appreciate suggestions. Ruben.

  1. Date: 7/7/2009 10:34:00 AM
    Better violent words than violent deeds. Very thoughful verse! Light & Love

  1. Date: 7/4/2009 10:38:00 PM
    Wow, very profound, Yoni! You are the master of introspection. Clever, riveting write! Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 7/4/2009 1:16:00 PM
    Imagination of the mind, can create a hellish, set of circumstances on a natural plane. But, as you seem to say Love is the real deal.

  1. Date: 7/4/2009 9:53:00 AM
    hello Yoni,interesting write---describing our mind,our master,do i get it?and the filled thoughts of suicide ,murder,pain,hatred.etc..,trying to make us do evil acts,still the loving heart wont allow this,the heart wins it all--you hug the mental door of your innerself and peace is found--beautiful write YONI--CHARMA