The Old Salt and His Sweet Dream

Forth he went upon the sea
grizzled and tough as he could be.

But when the old salt came to shore
he'd look for Jenny Lynn some more.

She was lost from him for years;
he'd shed a bucket of bitter tears.

Dreaming of the day they'd meet
the old man had a heart so sweet.

Someday he would find his daughter.
Till then he'd spend life on the water.


for "Sweet and Salty" contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 11/7/2013 11:58:00 AM
Hi Deb*nice* SWEET Or SALTY win................... HUGS ~SKAT~
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Date: 11/6/2013 7:25:00 PM
Deb, Congratulations On your way to xool Sweet & Sour win... always~ Linda aka PD
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Date: 11/6/2013 11:28:00 AM
i love the nostalgic feel of this one, deb..happy cheers to you for your win!..:) huggs
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Date: 11/6/2013 8:55:00 AM
Congrats on your winning work..Way to go!!!Sara
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Date: 11/5/2013 10:51:00 AM
Oohhhhh....sad...congratulations on your win...
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Date: 11/5/2013 7:57:00 AM
I enjoyed how this poem went a different direction from most of the others. You made it serious and I really liked it . Congrats in my contest.
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Date: 10/24/2013 6:24:00 AM
A lovely sweet poem Deb..Lovely!!!
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Date: 10/20/2013 2:23:00 PM
A tale right out of the old classics! Well done, Deb ! I hope he finds her !!!
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Date: 10/18/2013 11:23:00 AM
my, deb... a song so profound it hits me hard and whoozy... i like how you ended this spectaular piece... fine penning!..:) huggs
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Date: 10/18/2013 9:52:00 AM
Heartfelt approach to the theme of the contest, Deb
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Date: 10/18/2013 12:35:00 AM
This is a wonderful write, very salty and sweet my friend! I really enjoyed reading how you interwove the two together into your poem, it was very clever! What a fun piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 10/18/2013 12:22:00 AM
nice poem & best of luck.
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