The Bee

THE BEE! Not allowed to write about love No reason or whys This is about my first crush The girl passed right by me I smile softly to the one with curls She is the cutest I’ve ever seen Her face straight from a cover girl magazine Her eyes are too much for this world A honey made for me I walk away to the other end. I see, she really notices me. I continue talking to my friends. When another girl has her eyes on me Dropping her books Putting her ass where I can see. In front of my friends, I had to pretend, That It was a joy I have one thing to say, Why did I allow myself to be stung by the wrong bee? **Phil J.

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/28/2010 3:48:00 AM

I stopped by here again so I could thank you for your kind comments. Wishing you a wonderful day. Love, Carol

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/21/2010 6:56:00 PM

AHH, you got stung by the wrong and stuck with her. hahaha. You are young you will get over it. LUcky you, a life ahead of you. Fun write. lUv, andrea

Jay Loveless

Date: 4/15/2010 9:14:00 AM

Tagg, your it (;

Heather Hill

Date: 4/11/2010 9:13:00 PM

Great write, I think you should write about love, its not always a waste, keep it up I look forward to writing more, please check mine out as well,- blessed, one

Robb A. Kopp

Date: 4/11/2010 11:10:00 AM

Great metaphore of the bee.Well written. As far as what to submit, submit what you wan't.I average abot four a day.some days Ionly write one and othere eleven.I write for a stress reliever and self entertainment.If my thoughts move someone else so be it.Anyway welcome to poetry soup!

Lynette Chachere

Date: 4/9/2010 6:38:00 PM

i hope you write another poem for us to read soon(: -Always&Forever Lynette

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/9/2010 4:15:00 AM

I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup Boy. If you would like to have more of your poetry read please limit your postings to 3-5 poems per day. In doing this more of your poetry is read and other poets can also have theirs read. I also wish you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 4/9/2010 3:48:00 AM

short comments are fine...enjoyed is my favorite.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/8/2010 5:58:00 PM

To the new kid. I enjoyed your comment on my words. I think you are to much for me. Do read more of my poetry . You will want to read more. Like this little write of yours .Is more like a song. Or you can be like the others and judge me not. Go ahead write some more cute stuff. I will comment he who comments me. That is my new motto.

Royal Trevino

Date: 4/8/2010 5:17:00 PM

awh.. cute right... don't worry the sting eventually goes away, I myself after a while decided not to write about love... cuz when it comes to love it won't have a happy ending, anyways enjoyed your write and thanks a bunch for your supportive comments:)

Mitch White

Date: 4/8/2010 5:11:00 PM

Funny one- bar fly's sting too

Lynette Chachere

Date: 4/8/2010 5:06:00 PM

lmao.ha ha! you should have knocked her over in her bend.a bee. .well good luck.someday.-Always&Forever Lynette

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/8/2010 4:56:00 PM

Look out for those stings, Baby Boy. You're bound to experience many of them throughout your life. It's really nice reading the works of young poets here. Your mom must be proud! Love, Carolyn

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 4/8/2010 4:37:00 PM

funny and sad, keep looking a queen bee will come along.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/8/2010 4:35:00 PM

It has happened to all of us Baby Boy ... so never give up and continue sharing your creative writes with us all to enjoy..luv.. "Sweetheart"