Tell Me By Six

I love how we all sit in silence
as the clock begins to strike one
no surrender, we sit here, eyes open
waiting, we're waiting for sun

My fingers, they tap against the table
My thoughts are repeatedly on you
but not a word between us is spoken
and we're still silent as the clock strikes two

By three we're awake but so tired
you're still staring like i'm the one to blame
and maybe it is, but maybe it's you
but i don't speak, we sit here in shame

it's as if i'm sitting with a statue
 as creepy as the creak of the door
so eerie, a ghost sitting across from me
and i'm spooked as the clock strikes four

i can't believe that you haven't spoken
if you loved me then you would speak out
cause now the clock is chiming at five
and if i open up it will be a shout

it's six in the morning, we're restless
i can't believe that i wasted this time
your eyes haven't moved for two hours straight
and all i've got from that night, was this rhyme
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 6/13/2012 10:03:00 PM
Quaintly captured moment.
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Date: 6/13/2012 9:56:00 PM
gosh, for 16, you sure wrote a mature poem!! It sounded like something that would be written by a married woman with a very strange kind of husband!! Was this from a real experience? I have to know! Great poem, Juli!
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Juli- Michelle
Date: 6/14/2012 7:36:00 AM
Yes it is a real experience, a little embellished in the poem, of course, but it was quite infuriating and sad that i wasted a whole night on a statue of a boy
Date: 6/13/2012 8:57:00 PM
Very creative! I enjoyed this. Fav'd it!
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Juli- Michelle
Date: 6/13/2012 8:59:00 PM
thank you!
Date: 6/13/2012 2:42:00 PM
like it!!!
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Date: 6/13/2012 2:08:00 PM
Sounds like you've practice some great patience throughout these hours so to end in disappointment and maybe even agitation and frustration overall is better that pure anger. This was nice <3
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Date: 6/13/2012 7:59:00 AM
Juli, I haven't read your poems before so i'm glad you commented on mine so I could know you were on the soup cause I love this poem. You did an awesome job with it. Simple, well written and great description about a feeling or feelings that are so hard ordinarily to describe. a success for sure with this write of yours.
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Juli- Michelle
Date: 6/13/2012 3:18:00 PM
Thank you!
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