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Tell Me By Six

I love how we all sit in silence as the clock begins to strike one no surrender, we sit here, eyes open waiting, we're waiting for sun My fingers, they tap against the table My thoughts are repeatedly on you but not a word between us is spoken and we're still silent as the clock strikes two By three we're awake but so tired you're still staring like i'm the one to blame and maybe it is, but maybe it's you but i don't speak, we sit here in shame it's as if i'm sitting with a statue as creepy as the creak of the door so eerie, a ghost sitting across from me and i'm spooked as the clock strikes four i can't believe that you haven't spoken if you loved me then you would speak out cause now the clock is chiming at five and if i open up it will be a shout it's six in the morning, we're restless i can't believe that i wasted this time your eyes haven't moved for two hours straight and all i've got from that night, was this rhyme

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Date: 6/13/2012 10:03:00 PM
Quaintly captured moment.
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Date: 6/13/2012 9:56:00 PM
gosh, for 16, you sure wrote a mature poem!! It sounded like something that would be written by a married woman with a very strange kind of husband!! Was this from a real experience? I have to know! Great poem, Juli!
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Juli- Michelle
Date: 6/14/2012 7:36:00 AM
Yes it is a real experience, a little embellished in the poem, of course, but it was quite infuriating and sad that i wasted a whole night on a statue of a boy
Date: 6/13/2012 8:57:00 PM
Very creative! I enjoyed this. Fav'd it!
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Juli- Michelle
Date: 6/13/2012 8:59:00 PM
thank you!
Date: 6/13/2012 2:42:00 PM
like it!!!
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Date: 6/13/2012 2:08:00 PM
Sounds like you've practice some great patience throughout these hours so to end in disappointment and maybe even agitation and frustration overall is better that pure anger. This was nice <3
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Date: 6/13/2012 7:59:00 AM
Juli, I haven't read your poems before so i'm glad you commented on mine so I could know you were on the soup cause I love this poem. You did an awesome job with it. Simple, well written and great description about a feeling or feelings that are so hard ordinarily to describe. a success for sure with this write of yours.
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Juli- Michelle
Date: 6/13/2012 3:18:00 PM
Thank you!

Book: Shattered Sighs