Surreal Nature

In the centre of the woods, I switched off my torch. Utter blackness. 
Wet branches drip-dropped onto my head. Fresh autumnal air blended with the smell of decaying leaves, and faint whiffs of wild plants lingered. 
The softly gurgling nearby river was the only sound, until a creature shrieked. An owl hooted and I shivered, although the night was mild.
Dead wood cracked and I spun round, disorientated. A fox cub barked. I smiled and then felt a spider’s sticky dewy web cling to my face. Tiny tickly legs crossed my forehead and left me. 
No other human was near. I felt at one with nature and sensed magic all around me. I could believe fairies danced in this place.
My ancient ancestors had felt all this. This moment was timeless. 

birds begin to sing
in the surrounding trees - -
shafts of light appear

7th October for Constance’s Haibun contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 10/25/2013 4:57:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work..Way to go!!!Sara
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Date: 10/25/2013 1:15:00 PM
I am sorry I have been out of the loop for so long, I hope I can back into sync soon but many congratulations on your win Jack xx
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Date: 10/25/2013 10:45:00 AM
Jack, , awesome Haibun. Have yourself a sweet day.......... LOVE SKAT
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Date: 10/25/2013 9:55:00 AM
congratulations Jack...PD
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Date: 10/25/2013 7:46:00 AM
Jack a monument of a poem love it congrats on a fine win Shadow x smile
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Date: 10/25/2013 5:05:00 AM
Congrats on the win in the contest, Jack
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Date: 10/24/2013 8:52:00 PM
To feel at one with nature, is a gift to cherish......and you did! I love it ......this is a wonderful peaceful poem!
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Date: 10/24/2013 8:49:00 PM
I would have screamed if I walked into a web but you make it sound so lovely and the light reflecting through it...nicely penned...congrats on your win :)
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Date: 10/24/2013 6:14:00 PM
Congrats on a fine piece and win.
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Date: 10/15/2013 10:11:00 AM
Dear Jack - "Wet branches drip-dropped onto my head." That snippet caught my attention like a spider crawling on my face. Just great. You've captured it - the same land of our ancestors. Ever feel like you've been there before - centuries ago?. love, Kathy
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Date: 10/12/2013 3:58:00 PM
you really captured the surreal feeling with yours, Jack. Loved it. Thanks for your comments. I could see you had done one for my contest. Thanks so much. It is not a wildly popular theme with most people.
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Date: 10/11/2013 10:14:00 PM
Nah, you don't need the shafts of light, you just need the utter dimness of an eerie Halloween evening! I really loved this Haibun, you have brought intrigue and delight of this splendid poem! I thoroughly loved this glorious write! What a fantastic piece, Great Work!!
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