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Surreal Nature

She was conceived of Springtime’s grace. Flower- child molded from the freshness and a burst of indescribable hues. Like Sabbath delicacy and freckled tints of June morning; this woman became the melody of dawn and solace of midnight. Until, grey winter blinded her eyes so almond. Cycles of discoveries slipped between dark and glitter. Oh, but her spirit remained undaunted--- more daring and quite misunderstood. Grandma listened to a glowing sky, instead; and fondled avian drawings through her chest. Her passion for life was full just the same. through a roused breeze image flares, tracing colors... muted in darkness Nonetheless, she tended leaves evergreen. More trails of seasons arose and departed; and in between, her words laced the Braille with wonder. Grandma held the moon that spiked her hunger for more flowers. She decorated her own thoughts without need for remorse; imagination came with her own sunsets, endless. And her fire for life was full just the same. as leaves cluttered moonlight swathes blossoms... opening new roots Haibun Form Contest, Broken Wings 9.30.2013

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Date: 10/25/2013 5:02:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work..Way to go!!!Sara
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Date: 10/25/2013 1:12:00 PM
I am sorry I have been out of the loop for so long, I hope I can back into sync soon but many congratulations on your win nette love xx
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Date: 10/25/2013 10:44:00 AM
Nette, awesome Haibun. Have yourself a sweet day.......... LOVE SKAT /
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Date: 10/25/2013 9:54:00 AM
nice win Nette... PD
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Date: 10/25/2013 7:31:00 AM
hi Nette congrats on a fine win Shadow x smile
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Date: 10/25/2013 5:00:00 AM
Congrats on the win in the contest, nette
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Date: 10/24/2013 8:31:00 PM
What a gorgeous poem about your grandmother......wouldn't she be proud? Just lovely, Nette!!
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Date: 10/24/2013 8:01:00 PM
you have crafted a very beautiful haibun Nette,...congrats on your fine win :)
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Date: 10/24/2013 6:06:00 PM
Your work is like breathing in fresh air. Congratulations Nette.
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Date: 10/24/2013 5:30:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Nette... jack
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Date: 10/1/2013 3:53:00 PM
Incredible, you have delighted me by your incredibly talented quill my friend! Probably my favorite line has to be, "this woman became the melody of dawn and solace of midnight." that is a very deep and ingenious write! What an outstanding piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 9/30/2013 9:55:00 PM
Thank you so much for sharing this very beautiful poem..... Lucilla
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Date: 9/30/2013 7:31:00 PM
soupmail..
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Date: 9/30/2013 7:28:00 PM
Wonderful haibun here Nette.Loved it.
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Date: 9/30/2013 3:46:00 PM
Can t get more beautiful than this sweet friend.How i missed your poetry on drake s show yesterday.Hope we get to hear your voice sweet friend..
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Date: 9/30/2013 3:35:00 PM
A very beautiful poem Nette! My love very well written! Thank you for checking in on my work and leaving your sweet comments! Feel free to read more if you choose! Great write Nette! :) xoxo
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Date: 9/30/2013 2:28:00 PM
like the breeze blowing rustling beautiful piece
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Date: 9/30/2013 12:02:00 PM
i'm glad you enjoyed my zombie cat and I loved you your write it was very refreshing after writting so many holloween poems to step back into the light. thanks for that
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Date: 9/30/2013 11:09:00 AM
I so like your thoughts,they portray deep sensitivity that is felt throughout the verse making the whole image come to life before my eyes. Skillful display of artistic expression.
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Date: 9/30/2013 9:47:00 AM
How beautiful! "Her words laced the Braille with wonder"...damn awesome!
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Date: 9/30/2013 9:36:00 AM
Very descriptive work that is uniquely your own design..Reads like a winner if for a contest..Thanks for the visit to my page..The comments were uplifting.Sara
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Date: 9/30/2013 9:34:00 AM
Hi Nette, A lovely tribute poem for a loved one that overcame diversity rich with imagery...Well inked...Thanks for visiting my verse.. Ken
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