Succubus

Three nights in a row, exhausted, no sleep Catatonic state, inner demons shall creep Dose (Was I asleep?) jerk violently awake Heavy pressure on chest, the weight of heartbreak Arms spread; you were nailed to the living room wall Struck dumb; I could not heed your faint, pleading c... ***Succubus is the female form of Incubus, demons believed to torture their sleeping victims by lying on there chests

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Norma Arana

Date: 3/10/2014 4:48:00 AM

Remarkable couplets artfully done. Congratulations, Tim.>> Norma

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 3/9/2014 4:43:00 AM

Congratulations on the fine win. Enjoyed the rhyme perfect, tim

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 3/9/2014 1:35:00 AM

Congratulations on the Tim... Verlena

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/9/2014 1:28:00 AM

splendidly written , tim... that hanging ' c...' took me by surprise!.. cheers to you on your fine win.. huggs

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 3/8/2014 9:23:00 PM

A great work indeed,congrats Tim.

Joyce Johnson

Date: 3/8/2014 5:02:00 PM

Doesn't sound like fun but sometimes my 16 pound cat climbs up there. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

Skat A

Date: 3/8/2014 4:34:00 PM

your awesome.... SKAT

Juli- Michelle

Date: 3/8/2014 3:37:00 PM

This poem helped inspire one of my own, "Daunting." Check it out if you feel so inclined. Congratulations on your place win in my contest. You deserve it :) -Juli-Michelle

Karen Anglesey

Date: 7/29/2013 11:47:00 AM

WOW... very stark and scary theme. Well written. COngratulations on your win:)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/24/2013 9:00:00 PM

Tim, Congratulations!!! Thank you for the wonderful win. :-) Epic, it is. <3 always & forever <3 ''LINDA

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 6/11/2013 7:14:00 PM

Congrats Tim I knew it was a winner. SuZ

Carrie Richards

Date: 6/10/2013 6:59:00 PM

Oh wow........the last line unfinished........perfect!!!!!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 6/10/2013 2:19:00 PM

Congrad's on your win Light & Love

Skat A

Date: 6/10/2013 2:08:00 PM

congrats in Roy's contest............. SKAT

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 6/10/2013 1:27:00 PM

Congratulations Tim xx

Nato Calubiran

Date: 5/30/2013 8:58:00 PM

another version for nightmares. i have an entry for this contest too, "Come Out and Play"

Debbie Duncan

Date: 5/30/2013 4:48:00 PM

I like this Tim,,,, I woke up 3 nights ago in rem sleep " I couldn't move" ;} as I was dreaming of my son opening front door, he said "0" get the cat mom. So I was trying to get up. I knew I was dreaming ;}

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/30/2013 4:12:00 PM

Wow...........disturbing !!!! I think the heavy pressure on my own chest is terror!!......yikes!

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 5/30/2013 3:28:00 PM

Very chilling. Rates high for Roy's contest. I haven,t been able to think of one yet. SuZ