Succubus

Three nights in a row, exhausted, no sleep
Catatonic state, inner demons shall creep

Dose (Was I asleep?) jerk violently awake
Heavy pressure on chest, the weight of heartbreak

Arms spread; you were nailed to the living room wall
Struck dumb; I could not heed your faint, pleading c... 

***Succubus is the female form of Incubus, demons believed to torture their sleeping victims by lying on there chests
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 3/10/2014 4:48:00 AM
Remarkable couplets artfully done. Congratulations, Tim.>> Norma
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Date: 3/9/2014 4:43:00 AM
Congratulations on the fine win. Enjoyed the rhyme perfect, tim
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Date: 3/9/2014 1:35:00 AM
Congratulations on the Tim... Verlena
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Date: 3/9/2014 1:28:00 AM
splendidly written , tim... that hanging ' c...' took me by surprise!.. cheers to you on your fine win.. huggs
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Date: 3/8/2014 9:23:00 PM
A great work indeed,congrats Tim.
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Date: 3/8/2014 5:02:00 PM
Doesn't sound like fun but sometimes my 16 pound cat climbs up there. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 3/8/2014 4:34:00 PM
your awesome.... SKAT
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Date: 3/8/2014 3:37:00 PM
This poem helped inspire one of my own, "Daunting." Check it out if you feel so inclined. Congratulations on your place win in my contest. You deserve it :) -Juli-Michelle
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Date: 7/29/2013 11:47:00 AM
WOW... very stark and scary theme. Well written. COngratulations on your win:)
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Date: 7/24/2013 9:00:00 PM
Tim, Congratulations!!! Thank you for the wonderful win. :-) Epic, it is. <3 always & forever <3 ''LINDA
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Date: 6/11/2013 7:14:00 PM
Congrats Tim I knew it was a winner. SuZ
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Date: 6/10/2013 6:59:00 PM
Oh wow........the last line unfinished........perfect!!!!!
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Date: 6/10/2013 2:19:00 PM
Congrad's on your win Light & Love
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Date: 6/10/2013 2:08:00 PM
congrats in Roy's contest............. SKAT
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Date: 6/10/2013 1:27:00 PM
Congratulations Tim xx
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Date: 5/30/2013 8:58:00 PM
another version for nightmares. i have an entry for this contest too, "Come Out and Play"
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Date: 5/30/2013 4:48:00 PM
I like this Tim,,,, I woke up 3 nights ago in rem sleep " I couldn't move" ;} as I was dreaming of my son opening front door, he said "0" get the cat mom. So I was trying to get up. I knew I was dreaming ;}
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Date: 5/30/2013 4:12:00 PM
Wow...........disturbing !!!! I think the heavy pressure on my own chest is terror!!......yikes!
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Date: 5/30/2013 3:28:00 PM
Very chilling. Rates high for Roy's contest. I haven,t been able to think of one yet. SuZ
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Date: 5/30/2013 12:12:00 PM
nicely penned Tim...I like that fourth verse...best wishes
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Date: 5/30/2013 8:36:00 AM
Scary stuff!
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Date: 5/30/2013 6:59:00 AM
A Succubus is the female form of an Incubus
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