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Subtly There

Subtle, heart breathes in
Catch a glimpse of heaven's face
Spiritual wanting 

Warming light beckons
Signal the rider, scoop'em up
While Cimmerians bleed

Bless the ones who ride
Angels at their side give speed
God fulfills the need

In that lofty lot
An importunate wish be
Call next upon me

Inchoate sins speak
Ice mars the surface of men
God perfects it then

Raise of the hand comes
The signal, the nod, for me?
Yes son, please, just ride.

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Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 1/31/2012 8:11:00 PM

enchanting lines of free flowing words Tim.. a special message between these awesome lines luv.. so enticing my friend..luv..

Trevor Mcleod

Date: 1/30/2012 7:55:00 PM

I like it Tim. This is my first time reading Haiku poetry. I think I understand it now. It's almost a teacher. You used some great metaphores. I liked the lofty lot one especially. You've helped open my eyes. Great write. Trevor

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/30/2012 6:35:00 AM

I like the next to last stanza..From it I gather that when we sin we become harden and become as ice..Sad that happens when we have a Savior who forgives..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara

Tim B
Date: 1/30/2012 8:35:00 PM

Thanks for the kind review, and you are correct about the next to last stanza :) Yet we carry these scars and learn forgiveness by his grace and forgiveness. Without the ice to mar, how then would we learn?

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 1/30/2012 12:33:00 AM

You've created a beautiful picture of death...peace, warmth, light, in the company of angels with our heavenly Father welcoming us to the other side. Thank you for sharing!! Blessings, Rhonda